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本主题由 小马学生工作处 于 2008-3-16 13:21 移动

还是请大家帮帮忙...

  我汗啊.... f6 F) G, c+ d0 ]" e+ u) d/ @" \
虽然没人理我 但我不灰心 大概是我自己没讲清楚自己的情况 让大家没法帮吧 ( S3 y5 n  L1 R
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我07年暑假的时候阴差阳错和同学转班到了新东方托福加强班 因为本来是想08年的暑假再考托的 想之前再去上...
: G0 b( z/ I. X8 A' C" G不过上好后我和同学都很雄心壮志的!老师们都很好很好很好 同学们也都很努
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但是由于我开始时还是想08暑假考 所以也就没有再看托福的东东了 直到...上学期期末考的时候...
' Z  ^) f/ \9 g4 j8 A& g9 ~7 ^4 m3 b6 umama突然和我说 要不你先试一次 看看到底怎么样 也不要你怎么准备...于是我就在二月的时候考了一次6 P) y2 K) G7 W* d# v1 |5 N! T
也不能算是全裸考 因为我之前把上个假期上新东方的笔记看了一遍 而且听写了十天的旧托每日听写" @9 f( m( O5 H, V8 _& u5 k1 q
考好后完全蒙掉了 因为口语没练 结果讲的结结巴巴 最要命的是作文...居然没打完...本来我平时打字就不是很快的 那天又紧张又冷 结果第一个作文本来有三点的 我就打上去两点 还没讲清楚 得了个limited(大打击啊 因为平时我自觉作文还可以...)第二篇就更惨了 连EST规定的300都没写到 只写了250多个字 本来想按课上讲的写5段式的 结果只写了两段半...不过这个得了个fair 我惊讶了一下下...
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之后回到学校 我就想我要发奋了!这学期我每天周五天中有三天是前两节没课的 但我还是每天按上课的时间起床 去自习教室听写(我是个暴爱睡懒觉的人 一直认为睡觉不睡过下午一点就不算睡了懒觉 所以这对我来说...)然后没课的时候就在自习教室里学习学习学习 直到它关门(10点)
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当我自己觉得自己比较努了 经过一学期的努力也许可以考的好一点了的时候 我有天兴冲冲的和我宿舍同学说“也许我这样努力 假期能考到100分内?” 让我万万没想到的是 她很鄙视得跟我说“你根本不可能. n  o* e$ f% ?, i; m: d3 \
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我当时脑袋里...“轰”的一下子 一片空白...6 B1 E; T7 {8 b% o/ L0 A/ h

  }8 D* g( j( L% [5 h% [& ^8 s3 u同学 你不鼓励我一小下下 哪怕你 骗骗我呢...哪怕你 什么都不说呢...
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2 M6 R4 c4 G) m- ~- `* H( m之后不久 我成绩出来了 92% H& s! J- a( O. G- O5 D4 J! `7 b
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口语 22
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比我想象中的高 我现在不想100了 我现在想110了 怎么样吧!!!你说我考不到 我偏考给你看 我就是累死了 这学期也要好好努力 到时候你就等着看吧 哼哼!!
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+ X2 h& e3 Y& B6 l5 |这几天每当我累了的时候 我就想马骏上课时讲得他学习累了就去捉弄他班上学的很好的女生的事情 觉得很过瘾... 嘿嘿
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所以 希望大家帮我指点指点 我现在在听写场景(下)每天6个lecture  语音识别已经听好了 我想加强一下写作 在哪里可以让大家给我的习作提意见呢?$ q( i9 P( ^. a' q% y

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我的第一篇作文 写了一个多小时呢..." m* G6 ~5 b, {' C, Q$ b( ~
It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. * e9 I2 S% `% k* m' z: n
Do your support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
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Faces with whether or not a new movie theater should be built in my neighborhood, a vast majority of my neighbors may argue that the new amenity would break the peaceful and quiet atmosphere in our neighborhood, but other people, who support this idea, would claim that a brand new cinema, by attrackting (attracting) more young boys and girls to come, would create a much brisker ambience, let alone the economic benefits it will bring about. As far as I am concerned, I believe the construction can be really profitable to our neighborhood.
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6 ^5 @. E0 _; l7 ^; CIn the first place, a new movie theater, needless to say, will be of great convenience for us residents in this neighborhood to enjoy the latest movies. My friends and I, as well as lots of other movie-goers in our community, have to go to a cinema one and a half hour's away from our home for every single movie we would like to watch. because (Because) of this, the time we spend on the way is sometimes even longer than the movie itself! What a waste of time and money! consequently (Consequently), if a movie theater is just in our neighborhood, it will save us a tremendous amount of time and money, which we can then spend on the movies, or popcorns and icecreams (ice creams) so that we will certainly have more fun.2 m) F% Y# l" @" m; c. b
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What I deem far more significant to our neighborhood is that the new cinema can create many a new job opportunity for our community. we (We) may mention a common example of any ordinary movie theaters we find in any shopping mall. What are some of the "universals" they share? That is, we find popcorn shops in every one of them; we encounter beverage and icecream (ice creams) shops in every one of them; we even see restaurants near every one of them. This perspective indicates that a cinema can provide job opportunities not only by itself, but (but also) by numerous businesses related to it.
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( X0 n: }: c8 W6 p8 h3 QHowever, superior as building a movie theater in our neighborhood is, it has its own disadvantages, too, which are the offenders worry about (which are the offenders worrying about). For one thing, it may be a sourse (source) of noise in our quiet neighborhood. For another, it may also bring some safety problems due to it will definitly (definitely) draw all kinds of people, nice and ill, to come in our neighborhood to watch movies, which of course is of less safety. yet (Yet) I reckon, by well-built, carefully choosing the location and taking more care of ourselves, can we solve all the problems.: D; [0 F& I7 O7 A0 E4 J

3 M$ n/ q' E$ s+ y  Z" YTaking into account all these factors, we could safely reach the sound conclusion that for our neighborhood as well as for people who live here, building a new movie theater is of gargantuan beneficial, though it may also bring us some little problems.
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0 [8 a+ y% B+ O' r' S2 L红字是 word 改出的错误 请大家帮我指点一下~~ 我觉得有的地方用词不准 但自己找不出来...

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呵呵 其前几天生病了...生病之前写的一篇作文也就没能贴上来% S- M, s( T, P- Z
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虽然发现还是没人来看 让我有点小失望 但自己想一下 把这当作一片幽谷中的花园不好么 虽没人来欣赏 我自绚烂的开着 自己耕耘 最后的果实却也甜美
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做个淘气的孩子吧 趴在船台上静看窗外的一切 没人注意到 倒也自在快乐
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6 L5 `( Q4 _; N+ a9 c  {0 n7.12 加油!自己加油!!
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(就是想找到自己这片没人睬的花园困难了点 每次都得搜...嘿嘿)
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+ \, j( M1 S9 l( h- O- W( b) Z作文 NO.2 上场啦~~
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If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire: an inexperienced worker at a lower salary or an experienced worker at a higher salary?% I/ y9 x8 T) ?6 ~, ]: b* G
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
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Currently, when it comes to the preferance (preference) between an inexperienced worker at a lower salary and an experienced worker at a higher salary, a vast majority of employers would claim that they prefer an inexperienced worker at a lower salary, due to the reduced cost of their companies, but people who choose an experienced worker at a higher salary, on the other hand, regard that the experience of employees is to a company what the foundation is to a skyscraper. As far as I am concerned, I would, if I were an employer, hire an experienced worker rather than an inexperienced worker, though the required salary of the former one may be higher.(114)4 X! I4 @0 @8 Q2 V+ `% @4 x
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First and foremost, a company in this rapidly changing world cannot survive without efficiency. And no doubt experienced workers can complete their assignments more efficient. How can I anticipate an employee who almost knows noting about the job before to fulfill his/her task without hesitation and faults? Not to mention the efficiency during the procedure and the fairness of the result. For instence (instance), once the company which my brother worked for (company, which my brother worked for,) recruited a worker who freshly graduated from a university, and was assigned to work in my brother's team. Since the boy was inexperienced, he could do nothing but asking and waiting others to tell him what to do. Although the boy eventually caught up with his collegues (colleagues), the efficiency of my brother's team was severly (severely) affected and had been criticized by the boss for several times.(146)
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  k4 d: Y3 A9 B  S' ?$ AAdditionaly (Additionally), the high salary paid to experienced workers does not seem that much compared to the fees a company has to spend on inexperienced workers to cultivate them, let alone the cost of their faults. Opponents would argue that an inexperienced worker may also do well in contributing to their company. (Opponents would argue that an inexperienced worker might also do well in contributing to their company.) However, an indeniable (undeniable) fact is that an experienced worker absolutely has a much bigger chance in doing so, and the extra paid money is worthwhile for the bigger chance. Furthermore, if I hired inexperienced workers, I would have to spend a great deal of money to enable them to perform excellent tasks. On the contrary, other companies can easily weaken their will of working for me, just by offering them higher salary, or, at least, my workers would claim higher salary to me as well. If so, should I also raise the salary to retain my workers? Then why didn't I just hire experienced workers at high salary at the very beginning? Or, should I just let them go, which would make my investment on them a total waste of money?(200)- e" f9 H$ M6 D% L! M
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Although so many disadvantages as hiring inexperienced workers may have, such as the loss of efficiency and the waste of money, it brings its own benefits to a company. For one thing, inexperienced employees are often quite modest and eager to learn. For another, they are extremely enthusiastic about their new career, which can bring the entire company 1 _& D/ R% N* p6 \
a more brisk atmosphere.(62)
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Taking into account all these factors, we could safely come to the sound conclusion that if I were an employer, I would like to hire an experienced worker at a higher salary, though inexperienced workers have their own advantages, because the particular advantage experienced workers enjoy.(46)* z* y" B2 p8 p( o" d

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9 m" ?5 T7 \0 S: Z. }& O又写了一个多小时 大概多写几篇就好了吧...
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找到了一个快速进花园的办法 嘻嘻

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