兄弟姐妹帮看看这个模版有什么问题~~orz
偶3月2日考托福，昨天知道成绩，那惨得，跟日本鬼子扫荡过的村子似的。作文分更是对不起党对不起人民对不起社会主义的新中国对不起……唉，现在就想知道我准备的这个模版有问题没有？欢迎大家都来拍我~~不胜感激。
In nowadays, there is a growing awareness of both the positive and negative influences of (topic). Depending on personal experience, personally type and emotional concern, we find that some people hold the idea of A, and others, in contrast, deem B as the premier choice. When faced with the decision of A or B, in my point of view, it is more advisable to chose A rather than B. Among countless factors which influence A, there are some conspicuous aspects as follows.
The main reason for my propensity for A is that there is sufficient evidence to show that A is to （某好处1） what the water is to fish. (examples) The situation is not unique, it is typical of dozens I have encountered.
There is another factor that deserves some words here. A is of amazing significance to （某好处2）. My friend Jack…(examples) This provides a concrete instance of A.
However, although I agree that there may be a couple of advantages of B, （某好处3） cannot survive without B, and （某好处3） means a lot. B is also essential to （某好处4）. But I hold the stand point that the advantages of A are more obvious.
In a word, to choose A or B is something of a dilemma to the public because they sometimes are confused by the seemingly good qualities and harmful aspects of them. Taking into account all these factors above, we may safely arrive at that (topic)
嗯，再次谢谢大家……
