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[写作] 第一篇作文,欢迎拍砖!!!

第一篇作文,欢迎拍砖!!!

本人实在是懒惰,离考试还有一个月才写第一篇文章,欢迎大家排砖!!!
8 S) J9 ^+ c3 {: Y/ }# S: Ka center for agriculture research or for business research?# I0 O' ~! F* x$ O. i5 A: i

: u# U! K# R5 t Many leaders of the government often go into raptures at the mere mention of the rapid development of the commerce. They are always talking about the prosperity of the shopping malls, the increase in the exported goods as well as the affluence of the businessmen. Nothing, they consistently maintain, is more glorious than the accomplishment of commerce on the economical growth. But is it really the case? The information I've collected over the recent years leads me to believe that the improvement of the commerce is less useful than the governors believe. In fact, agriculture plays a extremely vital role in the society and should be given priority. Consequently, I'm fully convinced that the big sum of money ought to be spent on the center for agriculture research instead of business research.
* D$ H( ~" W2 }" b+ b/ m  In the first place, there is no denying the fact that agriculture is the foundation of the development as a whole. Any progress in the society relies on the promotion of agriculture. Without doubt, agriculture is the basis of commerce as well. To a nation, commerce without undeveloped agriculture is like fish without water and is certain to be doomed. Like some developed countries such as America, Japan and the like, so solid is the basis of their agriculture that they can enhance their commerce actively and spontaneously. Obviously, superb agriculture's conditions produce positive effects on the prosperity of commerce.
& Q5 D$ B# t$ _6 B; k5 A  In the second place, we feel obliged to consider the serious situation of the china's agriculture. It must be noted that the improvement of our nation's agriculture seems to be not able to catch up with the soaring in the population and there are thousands of peasants who still live a miserable life and have to face the danger of starvation and exposure. It is not exaggerating to say that the basis of the China's agriculture is unstable compared with those developed countries. Accordingly, it is absolutely necessary to build a center for agriculture research in order to eliminate the problem as soon as possible. It is better for us to harness the center to devise the advanced technology which will open up a new era of food production and one day not only allow everyone in China to triumph over the starvation but also live a fairly comfortable life.6 X, K4 s+ H: B
  From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion that building a center for agriculture research is a wise decision and it can and should make maximum contributions to the leap of the agriculture.

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8错8错..我也是还一个月考..写的没你好...
: F, ?2 i0 r+ |9 F* L1 k) ELike some developed countries such as America, Japan and the like
# Q1 v" j: s8 Y: l+ {. j这句最后的the like,是个句型么?这点我有疑问.
, Q+ n3 d6 K, [7 K! ]4 e还有就是2,3段开头的引导换种说法更好啦
! Z6 g- I; R- Z' z- x' [) Y2 g拙建8要笑话我哈

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Thank you!!!and the like 是and so on的意思。但我觉得我里面的词汇替换太少,比如“发展”我重复的词太多,显得不够生动。

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有一个阅读词汇的互换,我觉得挺有用的,你搜搜看3 g# v( b- d) L  b# m
我用词也不熟,属于那种会看不会用的,写的时候根本想不到要用...

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回复 4# 的帖子

是啊,有时候专门去看了,但是写的时候还是想不到或者用的很生硬阿

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相当不错,比我写的好,我的TF作文都27,你肯定没问题。

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