按照要求,回复8楼的朋友,因为本人语言造诣不高,不敢妄自指点,所以仅提出问题,具体改成什么,8楼的朋友自己考虑一下
个别拼写错误,如demonished,econology等
shortcoming感觉有些口语化,换成flaw更好些（不确定~）
第一段的ignored不应该用过去式吧
Nevertheless, if we watch TV under control of time, it still a good way that we obtain information.
这一句少个is'
最后一句的Obviously, it is high time that people should change their method of watching TV. 中high time用法感觉有问题
总体来说8楼的朋友思维还是很明确的

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你可以先邀请上下楼来改

我邀请11楼的朋友帮我改(按照版主的规定)............还没人改我的...

[ 本帖最后由 hys17 于 2008-4-6 10:44 编辑 ]

这几天有些事上不了~~~
呵呵  大家都交了这么多拉哈 真好！
今晚回来写了篇  大家给给建议呵

Do you go picnic with your friends in a sunny weekend instead of sitting in front of television? Do you have a walk with your family after supper without stay at home for  watching television? Do you spend leisure time with your child for fun without television?

If your have not experience these usually, it is no doubt that television play a detrimental effect on your life. First and foremost, television will take us a large mounts of time everyday. Everyone only have twenty four hours a day, the more television take, the less leisure time we have got to share with our family and friends. I can think of no better illustration than the following case. When I was young, I spend much time in interesting movie in theater, meaning exhibition in museum, funny and mysterious mountains with my friends. But now, we are fascinated in television. Scarcely can we enjoying our time and friendship outdoors! From where I stand, television took the time away, decreased the enjoyment with friends and family.

Furthermore, Confucius, our greatest ancient thinker, convinced that" People will lose their will power when they are indulged in one thing". It is still workable nowadays. People may have endless desire, but their energy is limited. The conflict between the children and parents in television is common to see in these days! A survey conducted by C.C.O.(China Child Organization) in 2008 pointed out that nearly 70 percent of children are can not prevent from television effectly. Many children are too immersed in television that their study are seriously effected, parents are worried about that, teachers are feel difficult to teach them. That's all brings about by television which took the energy away.

Admittedly, television has their own merits such as we can learn interesting news, latest technology, amazing things like animals and culture over the world. That kind of things really enriched our life. However, television's disadvantages are more than merits, so, I still reinforce my stand point of view.


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谢谢
我是个好孩子不会随便打人的
谢谢！谢谢！

谢谢
为什么给你回复总被禁止呢~~晕

不好意思啊，因为最近有事都没在家里，也没上网~~~真的很抱歉啊~~~

A professor of my university sociology course once stated that the invention of television had greatly influenced the interpersonal relationship in all ages. Meanwhile, the debate of whether the television has destroyed communication among friends and family is heated among the whole society. As far as I'm concerned, television do effect our friendship and family communication a negtive way.

For starters, the produce of TV bring most of the families a battle of which channel to choose. My best friend Xiao Hong was always puzzled with this problem. When TV time comes, she would be ready to fight for the entertainment shows with her mother who loves to watch Korean soap shows and her father who enjoys NBA games. Her family seldom agrees on the same program, so the outcome always was that some people happy, while others not, which did harm to the family members' unity. Nowadays Xiao Hong's family seldom watches TV so that there would never be a intensive fight. Therefore TV really destroy the family relationship to some extend.

The same situation also happens among friends. It forces you to watch some programs you don't  like so that you won't be stupid when friends are all talking about the program. Previously, a TV program of sing compitition called Super Girl Voice was extremely popular among the youth. Almost all of my friends was addicted to that show that the most important thing of a day was watching the show and guess who would be the winner. During these days, I was totally isolated because I'm not interesting at these activities at all. I even can't take part in their talks which made me feel uncomfortable lonely and upset. I wish there were not be a kind of device called TV, which can take my friends away.

From what has been mentioned above, we can come to the conclusion that, television not only damage our family relationship, but also do harm to the friendship. Although the invention bring us many advantages such as the variety of information and a kind of entertainment, we can't take the relationship with others as commutation. We should find out what we really cherish during this lifetime.

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[ 本帖最后由 TSONG 于 2008-4-6 22:45 编辑 ]

不好意思哦，水平有限，只能是提出问题了呵呵，你也不要打我哦
第一段：“The idea is strongly opposed by people who hold the opinion that television occupies so much time which was expected for communication and endless arguments would subsequently arise.”中的“which was expected”是不是应该用“is”？
第三段“Usually, ideas about those issues may fiercely contrary to each other and no one would recede until a controversial provokes. ” 里的"controversial"是形容词，应该用名词“controversy”吧
最后一段“Though the advantages TV programs enjoy are considerable, it cannot compete with the benefits that lead to, when the two main reasons me3ntioned above are taken into considerable.”里advantages后面少了个介词“of ”；然后那个“it”是不是应该用“they"?;最后“mentioned”多了个3，嘿嘿。
还是最后一段“the reasons I have analyzed could at least make them more aware of various dimensions of the issue under discussion.”总觉得“dimensions”用在这好像不太对？不知道楼主能不能解下小女子的惑？
还是还是最后一段“In fact, it would be better if time occupied by TV programs could be used in a half to communicate with family members.”里面“in a half ”怎么解释？