印刷术20年后会消失吗?


As the Forrest Gump's mother say, "Life is like a box of chocolates, you never know what you are going to get inside". In this updating world, science technology is developing in a high speed, so there is a controversial discussion about whether printing will disappear in twenty years.

To begin with, printing products cost a large certain place to store them, it make people laborious when read some thick printings, and an acient documents surely would destroyed by insects that results the information lost. For example, I have an English-Chinese dictionary, it includes numerous of information, however, with more than thousand pages, it is no doubt that the dictionary would as thick as a brick. But compared with electrical-production, it contains different kinds of dictionary and other books, the essence point is that the weight of it is no more than 200 grams. Hardly can I imagine that reading my favorite book on the peek of the mountain. Besides, every time since I read the ancient documents in the library, which are pale yellow and the paper are likely to worn out, what will happen to them just one hundred years later?

Furthermore, as the calling prevailing in 21st century, "Environment is the prerequisite of the development" But nearly all the printings are made of wood, plants, and fibers. The world consumes an uncounted number of trees and plants on printing books or other products. This kind of behaviour has a detrimental effect on the local environment, and then brings about a serious effect on global atmosphere. Trees have the ability to contain the water, hold the soil, and play a vital role in global weather system. A recent survey by W.E.O (World Environment Organization), the green coverage of China dropped 8 percent in ten years. It is a signal; we should do something to stop it decreasing!

Admittedly, printings also have their merits. As a tradition way of reading, people are accustomed to it, some people even have a strong emotion of it, fascinated with the touch of softy paper, enjoy the new book’s smell spread by ink, and even the acient book stored by people.

Obviously, we can draw the conclusion that the printings is inconvenient for people to read and also do a negative effect on environment, even global situation. The disadvantages of the printings overshadow its merits, so I cling to the point that printings will disappear in twenty years.

[ 本帖最后由 wuhao5217195 于 2008-4-24 15:57 编辑 ]

the peek of the mountain是要意指浪费了很多树木么？
这不是在第二段提到的么？

第一段，say>says   in a high speed>at lightning speed
第二段，it make>it makes, when read>when reading, thick printings后面的逗号去掉
documents>document,    would destroyed>would be destroyed
that results the information lost>so that the information would be lost
numerous of information>countless information因为 numerous不能修饰不可数名词而且也不能和of 连用，同时information 后面的逗号变成句号因为however 不是连词而是副词
with more than thousand pages, it is no doubt that the dictionary would as thick as a brick这一句中thousand>thousands of, it>there, would>is
But compared with electrical-production, it contains different kinds of dictionary and other books这一句中it指代的是书本，不是电子书，所以指代错误，同时dictionary没用复数，books后面用句号
which are pale yellow and the paper are likely to worn ，建议放在ancient documents后面然后将in the library放最后，同时and the paper are likely to worn 改为and whose papers are likely to be worn out
第三段，But nearly all the printings are made of wood, plants, and fibers. 这不是个句子，but 是连词，这一句是用来做从句的，但没有主句所以不能单独出现
local environment后面的逗号去掉
hold the soil, and play a vital role in global weather system句中hold,play前加to
A recent survey by W.E.O (World Environment Organization),这是个名词，不能单独出现，改为A recent survey held by W.E.O shows that...
ink后面的逗号去掉
最后一段，is inconvenient>are...      overshadow its merits>overshadow their merits

O了，哇，LZ有明显的进步哦，文章的结构也比以前清晰，观点也更加明确了
加油吧~~

回复2#  
打错了  应该是peak

回复3#
好人啊~~哈哈
又看见你了哈哈~~

这些语法错误还是有....
看来这些错误不是一次两次可以解决的....
但我尽量在控制了  最近在补了些语法
我再改改~~~~继续!
大恩不言谢~呵

But compared with electrical-production, it contains different kinds of dictionary and other books

But compared with electrical-production which contains different kinds of dictionaries and other books.
crown  可以这样改吗?

还有第三段的那句But nearly all the printings are made of wood, plants, and fibers

改成
Due to nearly all the printings are made of wood, plants, and fibers result  that  the world consumes an uncounted number of trees and plants on printing books or other products.
行不?

不行不行，关键是语法又有问题了，用了but,这表示是个从句，主句没有。而且你想想，开始说书本和砖头似的，就是在说书的不好，后面怎么能用BUT呢，but 表示转折，如果用了就表示该说好的了。实际上你应该用递进的手法说，纸书不好不光因为它厚，而且有比它好的又薄又全的电子书
再想想怎么写吧~~

还是不对，前面不应该用as 引导那个名言，而是though,然后名言结束用逗号，后面的内容和最开始写的一样就行了，不过要把but 去掉，
你新改的句子中due to 不能直接接句子，而是接名词的，所以不用改那么多
原文中那几句只要把as 变成though,名言后面用逗号，并且把but 去掉就可以了~~

However, electrical-production, a new technology, which contains different kinds of dictionaries and other  books,  the weight of it is no more than 200 grams.
我恨语法啊啊啊
这样行不?

第二句你那样改真就行哈
厉害~~~