一定先写listening  因为重要的放前面，阅读让你看那么久，大家都看得懂，都能写出来，所以阅读不是关键，只要写出每个点就行，听力除了写出每个点必须还要有细节，所以就是先听力，阅读，听力，阅读，再听力，再阅读……

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which she made and the things she agreed to do for her friends while she was hurrying through her agenda
这里agreed to do 不太好
One authority on health of people
这句有点问题吧?
some personality disorder, say, distress,disturbance and anxiety and the like
say?笔误吧
and anxiety and the like 这里我觉得不对
moreover 后面又是一个数据, 干脆合起来吧

你看看对不

谢谢这位朋友的建议
不过我2个分论点都是说hurry的坏处，进而要slow down
你所说的让步段一般是在这2个分论点之后的1小段，不过当时写的时候时间太紧，就没有写

大家拍得很多了，我就指出两个修改稿里的语法错误吧
1.Jim,a guy in my workgroup,always trys to make things go quicker in spite of the reason that he wants to get our jobs done as fast as he can,which is nice.  trys改为tries  另外guy应该是一个十足的口语词汇吧……
2.Additionally,we would miss lots of amazing things when saying "Hurry up".  when 是连词 但后面连接的却不是一个句子，没有谓语，这种情况下从句主谓应该是不能同时被省略的
嘿嘿 个人愚见

第一段Some people prefer to get things down quickly……  应该是get things done吧
第三段 We really had a good time and completely escaped from the heave-load works. Work不可数
另外我觉得你第三段有点偷换概念，因为你写slow pace 可以提供我们更多的free time去享受生活，然后举了个烧烤的例子，重点描述了烧烤的乐趣，最后又写有些人很可怜，只能每天看合同之类的。关键是我觉得slow pace是使我们能更好的享受生活，而不是提供了我们更多的时间去做这些（说到提供更多的时间倒是quick pace更能提供）quick pace 也可以去烧烤啊，只是快速地烧烤失去了它本来的意义。也就是说quick pace 不等于让工作填满生活（因为题目只是说in a hurry to go to places and get things done）slow pace也不等于有时间去烧烤等，或许正因为慢而没时间去……不知道偶表达清楚没，这只是偶滴一点建议，又或许是我没有理解你的意思吧……嘿嘿

个人愚见哦

我说一下结构方面的问题，你的第一个理由段写得太长，第二个理由段太短，这样不是很好，因为你只有两个理由段，反差不可以这么大的，在时间有限的情况下，可以考虑第一个适当减减肥，把时间挪到第二个上来，加个例子什么的。
个人愚见 呵呵

第二个理由段中心句有点不太恰当，生活中 be filled with busy work 不等于quick pace 题目只是说in a hurry to go to places and get things done，并没有说让工作充斥生活。这样写我觉得有点偷换概念，这点我在25#提过，你可以去看看啊，中心句有问题后面的支持段难免也会跟着出现同样的问题
个人愚见  ^_^

With fast development of the world today, people, as an essential part of it, the pace of their life are becoming rapid.(这句话写得太纠结了，头太重而脚太轻) So, many people are facing with such a dilemma, whether they should hurry to go to places or take their time and live a more（去掉） slower pace.  I prefer the former one.

To begin with people living in this developing world, it is no doubt that they need to catch up with the pace of the development. I can think of no better illustrations than following cases, I am a college student. I have to spend a large number of time(a large number of 不能修饰time) on my majors, such as mechanics, statics, materials and so on. However（这里不是转折，反而有点像递进）, when China join the WTO, it is (去掉)brings about more international communication in our major, so, English becomes an essential ability in this field. Only can we save the time from daily life and live a rapid pace of life to conquer more knowledge. So, only hurry to go to places and get things done can make us able to survive in the world.

Furthermore, as an old saying goes, “Time is money, efficiency is life
". We should search a more efficient life style. People usually have an uncounted issues （既然是issues为什么又会是an？）to deal with, a great number of things need to learn from developing world, and also limited time just 24 hours a day are available for them.（这段有两种解释，1.people 是主语，后面三个是句子的一个成分，用and连接形成并列; 2. 是三个句子用逗号隔开并且用and连接形成并列，但是不管是哪种解释，这里面都有语法问题，很难表达清楚，你还是自己先看看自己是哪种意思，偶不敢妄改） If we are （去掉）intend to succeed in doing something that others can not do, we are （去掉）probably think more and practice more, only can we figure it out that if we can save more time from our daily life. A recent survey conducted in 2008, there are （去掉）nearly 70 percent of people who are leaders of their fields, are hurry to go to places and get things done. All of that is for save more time to focus on the things that they deem important.

Admittedly, there are also some disadvantages to live in too fast pace. For example, results from the fast moving pace, we always forget where we intended to go, what we chased to get, and even the way back to home. Nowadays, it becomes a serious problem for modern people.


Obviously, we can draw the conclusion that although hurry to go to places and get things done have a detrimental effect on people's life, but(去掉) the merits of it overshadow its disadvantages, so I cling to the point that to the former one.


还是会有那种be动词后面接原型的习惯性错误，不过已经大有进步了（这语气好像装得偶自己好牛一样，不好不好，忽略吧 嘿嘿……）加油加油


个人愚见

我觉得你第一个理由段和第二段有点写重了的感觉，然后就是最后一段是另外一个理由段，只有两句话，没有well developed。 没有结尾，最后一个理由段又写得很短，这样很明显就会被认为是没写完，结构不完整，后果很严重
个人愚见 o(∩_∩)o…

哈哈 谢谢
这篇真的没发挥好，有好多错误
say 是举例子用的，和for instance 差不多
and anxiety and the like 应该是…… anxiety and the like   多打了一个and   笔误笔误
数据那里，我本意是想合起来写的，但是写了之后又觉得好像句子衔接上又问题，比较生涩，于是就加了个moreover,又觉得这个连词好像用大了，矛盾啊…………