看完之后没有搞清楚你的观点。 首先你的开头很长一部分都没有提到话题，一直在分析其他人，没有让人知道你的观点，然后你开始分析优缺点，最后的结尾让我觉得似乎是中立的态度，可是文章又偏向于反对快，赞同慢。。。我觉得你的思路有点乱，首先你要有一个明确的态度，就是让读者可以确定的态度，不然就是一直带着疑问你到底想赞同什么而读。。。
个人愚见，，，我自己水平也不高，27号刚刚考完呵呵。。。没有准备，裸考状态，考前还住了3天院呵呵，所以我也没有什么好的东西可以说，只是我的感觉和理解，希望对你有帮助，还有，祝你好远。。。平常心很重要，只要不紧张就一切都没有问题

To sum up, though I admit maybe doing thing has some advantages 这句 doing thing 和has 中间落词了
The other reason 应该是Another 吧，
“we must spend enough time to wait for the result of experiment; scientist also must spend more time to understand deeply why it happened and what the theory is..”标点不要乱用哦。 我想你应该是联系没注意吧。
还有你文章中有时是“doing things ”有时是“doing thing ”
我觉得最大的问题是态度啦

谢谢~~~太感动了，那么详细！
不知道为什么写着写着就不会断句了，觉得好像自己都失控了
改改，一定注意！
真的很有必要重新写一遍这个题目~太失败了~~

[ 本帖最后由 yoyo 于 2008-4-28 16:55 编辑 ]

恩，写的时候就觉得重复了~但是真不知道怎么写了~~~后面就是没话找话说，所以结构很有问题，谢谢

谢拍，呵呵拍就很感激了，怎么敢生气，哈哈
确实写的很有问题，谢谢，一定改正

There has been a controversial debate about the topic that whether people should live life at a slower pace.
live life好像不太对吧，直接用live at...应该就可以了。

because they note that human beings should struggle to develop themselves constantly in order to survive
感觉这句也不太好，特别是in order to，但是不知道怎么改
others’ opinion which I cannot agree more shows that it is better to enjoy most of the things in life and therefore slowing down paces is a sound life style.
agree后面少个介词吧，agree with,还有show就可以了，more 是比较级，show是动词，应该不能那么用吧，therefore前面的and可以去掉，pace--is, paces--are；a sound life style是什麽意思？
more time is available for people to think since thinking is a significant activity of human being
think what?感觉好像是少了点东西~
It actually took me a long time to decide which is my preference
which was~
it’s not bad to enjoy life while we spare no effort to dig with study or work, which ask us to live life with a slower pace
with studying or working; live life？
水平有限，互相学习

再次谢谢13#的，有几个问题想请教一下
I’m inclination to an unhurried pace of life.
I’m inclining to an unhurried pace of life.
这个句子是照着DELTA一篇阅读用的，应该没什么问题吧~~？
In contract, people to work consecutively could obtain a conclusion readily.
In contract, people who work consecutively could obtain a conclusion readily.
这个地方是语法错误吗？一定要to work不能who work？还是说用to work好一些？
Moreover, no one will deny that the aim of everyone came into the world is enjoy and feel the life which always superior to the work.
Moreover, no one will deny the fact that the aim of everyone for coming into the world is to enjoy and to feel the life which is always superior to the work.
deny后面一定要加the fact？因为我上一篇也那么写的但是老师只给改了别的地方没改这，是因为看漏了所以没改吗？
谢谢

谢谢 漂亮的melissa_lee的建议。希望你能考到你希望的分数

呵呵,我之前也说了,我的语法也不好,只是按照阅读习惯,感觉不对的就给改了,见谅

第一个地方我不确定,只是没见过这种说法,因为一般都是be doing sth,such as I am going to do some laundry.如果是阅读中有出现过，就当我才疏学浅，ignore吧

第二处2句的区别是，你的那一句的主语是people to work consecutively ,我改的主语是people，看你原意吧，如果你的原意就是指people to work consecutively 这件事obtain......，那就没错

第三处当时读的时候感觉有点别扭，不过后来一看应该没问题的，sorry~

语法不是很好~见笑了~

全文批改如下：
根据10楼和11楼2位朋友的建议,改正了一下,Adapted text:
   As we all see,currently people tend to be faster to do everything as possible by the reason that most of them believe being fast would bring high efficiency,while on the other hand,some people like to slow things down in order to make them do better.Being a calm person,I would rather take my time and live life at a slower pace because of the flaws come from the rushing.
   No one could deny the fact,foremost,rushing would go with carelessness,which is one thing that is unacceptable in the modern world and could bring terrible results,not efficiency.Jim,a guy in my workgroup,always tries to make things go quicker in spite of the reason that he wants to get our jobs done as fast as he can,which is nice---这句去掉.Then it turns out that he constantly makes mistakes which got us into trouble almost every time.I could not forget the time that--改为when he missed a little process in our object and we got cut off from the financial support.I believe no one would think he is a good worker--这话说的太重了 even though he does get things done quickly. Ironically,most of the "done" is sort of weak.--这是什么意思？我替ETS问一下。
Additionally,we would miss lots of amazing things when we are saying "Hurry up".Some people--建议若真有人这么说就说some wise old man said that the people who live slowly are smart,which is a point that many people could not understand.Imaging,for instance,when you were quickly trying to catch a butterfly but you missed a bunch of rare and beautiful flowers even though you caught the butterfly eventually.Would that be a successful result?Trying to slow down and sit to watch the beautiful flowers,maybe you will get a prettier butterfly later.By that,you did not miss anything and you grabbed something even better.
Rushing hour made us want to do things by a higher pace,developing economy made us try to be more efficient,but we still need to stop once in a while even slow our total pace, try stuff with finer thoughts and count the things we may have missed.Life goes on more wonderfully by more consideration,which would be turned down by most of the "hurry up".