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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Watching television is bad for children.

I am always amazed when I hear people saying that television provides children a beneficial way to study and that if only children could watch television, they would obtain knowledge faster. Even if one could not know from concrete examples (one child in his own family, for instance) that television lead to enormous harm to children, one could deduce it from three conspicuous aspects as follows.

The most consequent point for my penchant is that watching television may well make children become isolated, inactive and eccentric. My cousin Jim, for example, has been addicted to television for a long time. Doing so a large crowd of people have a way of thinking, is a positive method to study. As matter of fact, it is the other way around. Jim, to some extent, began to escape from his real life, at the bottom of his heart and from the reality of his study. How detrimental the television’s influence it is!

Another reason can be seen by every person is that a large of television programs are never without violence, sexual alluring and bloody contents. Watching them, children in all likelihood become violent and aggressive. According to a recent of survey done by Chinese Juvenile Delinquency Research Institute (CJDRI), more than 56% of the juvenile offenders watched this kind of television programs. Such programs undoubtedly have negative effects upon the mental state of children.

Eventually, watching television, especial soap opera, waste copious amounts of precious time. For instance, Friends which popularity is supreme and unchallenged has ten seasons and expand over 300 hours. Hardly can I imagine any child has so much leisure time to watch it if he do not occupy his study time.

Admittedly, television, to some degree, may exert a relatively beneficial effect on children’s education, such as Discovery, National Geography and The Animal World. However, the inevitable negative consequences overshadow the merits. Therefore I reinforce my standpoint to choose that watching television is bad for children as my final choice.

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最后一段，第二行，to choose去掉

谢谢楼上修改

写出这么多语法错误还是头一次，泪奔中……

结构很清晰哈~~~

a large of television programs are never without violence
never without violence...
感觉不对
may well make children become isolated
well不太好 应是用在好的方面  换了吧
Friends which popularity is supreme and unchallenged has ten seasons and expand over 300 hours
问下  HAS 换成  up to 行不?
expand 还是 expended?
recent of survey   of 去掉吧

写的蛮好的呵~~

How detrimental the television’s influence it is!          it 去掉
especial soap opera, ？？？especial ly


加一句  写得很好

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