1、第一段前两句之间貌似没有因果关系。。如果老话说“事实检验真理的唯一标准”。。那这个问题怎么就是“有争议的”了呢？

2、My major is civil engineer, our course included many difficult and abstract courses, such as construction mechanics, statics, material mechanics and so on. There are uncounted ideas and concepts in it.
两句可以合成一句：
In my major, civil engineer, which hold uncounted ideas and concepts, included many difficult............

3、第2段可以举一个有关专业的具体例子，取代列举的courses..应该更有说服力

4、World civilization existed for such a long time and there a large number of noted people in philosophy, physical, mathematical, chemistry and so on.
前面用过and so on了，这里可以直接写一个,ets.

5、第三段这个例子挺好的！

6、Besides, inventions are beginning with the ideals and concepts, than put them into facts.
应该是with the ideas and concepts吧，可能是笔误

7、最后一段，前面用过得comprehension可以改成understanding; merits可以改成advantages  避免重复

个人意见，仅供参考！

P1 so, there... 似乎与上一句逻辑的逻辑关系不对。（同楼上）
P2 Only after we take the course to attend the factory and learn facts we breakthrough the difficulties. 这句话好像有点问题，Only after we had taken the course of attending the factory and learned facts can we make breakthrough in the difficulties.
Hardly can I imagine that if we can not learn facts, it can be extremely a trouble for our courses.         ...it would be a extremely trouble...
P5 ...make us...
说的不对还希望指出来啊，共同进步啊！

[ 本帖最后由 TSONG 于 2008-5-1 22:55 编辑 ]

回复12#的帖子

多谢批改~~~~
开头那句我写了之后也有这样的感觉
.......写急了呵
2   你那样改就好多了 ~~~~
换词方面是得注意下呵~~~

回复13#的帖子
多谢多谢呵

那句确实有问题......
P2 改得很好呵
谢拉哈~

回复2# 的帖子

字真小呵 ~~~~
worth more weight 可以吗?
数学该是理论的 化学实验 笔误吧呵呵
第2段
concepts are basic of facts
开头不是说事实比理论重要吗
结构再加强下哈

今天困了  明天再看呵

[ 本帖最后由 wuhao5217195 于 2008-5-1 23:47 编辑 ]

终于写完了，不过限时写还是很成问题的 大家帮拍吧，谢啦
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When introducing a new idea or concept that teachers would like their students to understand, teachers are always by setting examples or facts, which is simply supporting evidence. Does this mean that it is of more significance for students to gain the ideas or concepts than facts? As for me, contrary to the argument above, I believe that without any compelling reasons, it is too haste to conclude that assertion. As a matter of fact, I think it is as important for students to understand ideas and concepts as to learn facts, because they are complemented to each other.

In order to get a better understanding of ideas and concepts, it is necessary and imperative to learn facts well for all students. Since facts are vivid and interesting, they are able to trigger students' appetite for obtaining knowledge about ourselves and the world around us. And facts are also conducive to back up the concepts and ideas given by teachers, as a result, it is enable students to learn the essence of the ideas or concepts. For example, when discussing the idea that human had better to think over twice before leap, we can apply the example of the so called Star War defense initiative which had left with disastrous such as rampant gang violence at the end of it.

In the meantime, concepts and ideas well direct facts as well. When we get too many facts and examples without concept, it is easy for us get confused as we do not have a general idea of the matter. Students should have an overview of the point although they are attracted by various interesting facts. For instance, when teachers have given numerous facts about the quality of water but not mention what they are talking about mainly, students will get lost after listening the whole class.

In sum, judging from the compelling evidences provided, we can safely draw the conclusion that it is equally important for students to recognize ideas or concepts and to learn facts because they can benefit one another when we refer the process of studying.



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When introducing a new idea or concept, teachers always set examples or facts to back their main points and leave those examples or facts just as supporting evidence. Does this mean that it is more significant for students to gain the ideas or concepts than facts? As for me, contrary to the argument above, I believe that without any compelling reasons, it is too haste to conclude that assertion. As a matter of fact, my viewpoint is that it is as important for students to understand ideas and concepts as to learn facts, because they can complement to and interact with each other.

In order to get a better understanding of ideas and concepts, it is necessary to learn facts well for almost all students. Since facts are vivid and interesting, they are able to trigger students' appetite for obtaining knowledge about ourselves and the world around us. In addition, facts brace the concepts and ideas given by teachers, as a result, they are conducive to students to learn the essence of ideas or concepts. For example, when discussing the idea that human had better to think over twice before leap, we can apply the example of the so-called Star War defense initiative which had left with disasters such as rampant gang violence at the end of the initiative.

In the meantime, concepts and ideas well direct facts as well. When students have learned too many facts and examples without any concept, it is easy for them to get confused as they do not have a general idea of the matter. Students should have an overview of the point although they are attracted by various fascinating facts. For instance, when a teacher has given numerous facts about the quality of water but not mention what he/she is talking about mainly, students will get completely lost after listening to the whole course. Or perhaps a professor has set large amount of details regarding pollution, such as air pollution, water pollution and waste discharge, but he/she does not offer his/her opinion about these facts. Undoubtedly, students cannot identify whether the professor is positive or negative to pollution.

In sum, judging from the compelling evidences provided, no matter teachers present their lecture with facts or ideas and concepts first, we can safely draw the conclusion that it is equally important for students to recognize ideas or concepts and to learn facts because they can benefit from both of them in the process of studying.

[ 本帖最后由 cami119 于 2008-5-3 10:30 编辑 ]

谢16#批改。。
那个worth more weight ,应该是carry more weight..我短语没记住。。
数学、化学那个问题。。主要是我数学好，但是实在也没觉得数学有什么概念性的东西。。
我还是改过来吧。。易于理解。。
第二段是concept is based of facts..写错了
多谢啦！

[ 本帖最后由 free_fly_wing 于 2008-5-2 18:14 编辑 ]

谢谢这位朋友的批改,审题的时候没有看清.....考试的时候这样就完了
我修改一下,很快发上来

难为你了,这么抵触还是要看完,其实我觉得作文的批改制度还可以再灵活一些,不然像这位朋友这样多难受啊

。。。。。其实也没有那么难为啊。。。。
呵呵。。。。

In general, understanding ideas and concepts is essential in learning most courses. These brilliant thoughts handed down from our forerunners are the pith of their knowledge as well as the knowledge contained in the courses. Learning programming in the realm of computer, for example, the most important points are those seemingly basic but thoughtful ones, such as OOD (Object Oriented Design). This concept brought up by the precursor in the computer programming field tells us how to view the process of programming in a completely different way that every object have a representation of Class, with the C++ Language particularly.

Furthermore, a good understanding of ideas and concepts helps a lot in solving problems. After all, solving problems is a process of applying the related concepts into practice. After gaining a general and deep grasp, we could look at the problems from various angles, where innovative thoughts come from.

On the other hand, facts also play a very important role not only as large amounts of knowledge, but also an aid of comprehending the ideas and concepts related. Even in the subjects such as mathematics which are mostly ideas and concepts, basic facts should be memorized. Also, as ideas and concepts are abstract, which means hard to understand, related facts could be a great help in comprehending them.

As to the question which of the two is more important, in my opinion, the former one i.e. understanding ideas and concepts would be my choice. The relationship between the understanding of ideas and concepts and learning facts is similar to that of brain and hands. Both of our brain and hands are important but they are acting different roles. Without brain, hands won’t work. Similarly, without ideas, you can merely gain the skin-deep perception of subjects such as mathematics.

[ 本帖最后由 telly.bbs 于 2008-5-2 14:28 编辑 ]