站内搜索:
发新话题
打印

5月1日发放作文题7

本主题由 heqiongsophie 于 2008-5-1 11:16 设置高亮

回复9#的帖子

Therefore, I insist on my standpoint that learning facts is of vital importance.
感觉论点应该是谁更重要

The learning of the facts is more convincing than the obscure concept.
"the" 应该不用吧, concepts,而且,你的意思应该是facts are more convincing than obscure concepts, 而不是learning facts.

A famous experiment operated by Galileo on the leaning tower in Pisa was a strong proof. At that time, everyone believed that the heaver object would fall faster without seeing the fact by eyes since it was an idea of Aristotle who is the most influential Greek philosopher. However, after the seeing the result of the experiment, everyone was shocked, because the two balls with different weight fell on to the ground synchronously. Therefore, learning the fact is helpful to further understand a concept.
例子应该不恰当,所举的例子是fact contradicts existing concepts

Although, (去掉",")the learning of the concepts is essential, we can't operate a machine before we read the instruction, when comes to the question, which is more important, I should say the learning of the facts. To sum up, the discovering of the practical usage is not only convincing for understanding the concepts, but also making the learning more effective. Also the study of the concepts is aim to put them into the applied purpose. Therefore, when we learn knowledge or a brand new technology, we should think much of the practical usage to the basic concepts itself. 感觉观点有些模糊

祝你成功!

[ 本帖最后由 telly.bbs 于 2008-5-2 15:05 编辑 ]

TOP

回复 2# 的帖子

1."concepts are based of facts. "   感觉好像跟论点不符
2."geration”-------generation
3. but,so 尽量少用(这也是别人给我的建议,呵呵)

第一次改作文,水平有限,

TOP

回复9# 的帖子
第1段例子和我一样
觉得可以把例子和论证多结合点可能更好
最后一段有点小问题
理论学习可以再多写点
而且你又引出学习了实践更效率
不太好~~
水平有限呵
独上高楼,望尽天涯路!
                                   -------牛

今天比昨天好不就是希望吗?

TOP

回复6#的帖子
写得真好呵~~~学习

论证很强
但开头那个引语好象不太妥当样的
后面你说的是理论重要
还有第1个例子 不够恰当
好象和理论关联不大
ALL着类词尽量少用些呵

后天加油

[ 本帖最后由 wuhao5217195 于 2008-5-2 17:07 编辑 ]
独上高楼,望尽天涯路!
                                   -------牛

今天比昨天好不就是希望吗?

TOP

回复 24# 的帖子

呵呵,谢谢指点,这篇写得时候没感觉,很多地方我自己感觉也很牵强,很担心考试的时候也这样就完了
我的英文空间,对电影感兴趣的朋友可以去看看
http://murd-killer.spaces.live.com/

TOP

回复 22# 的帖子

多谢指点!
一定改正

TOP

回复 21# 的帖子

谢谢批改。
当时也的时候很没感。。提炼不出论点来。。再酝酿酝酿吧。。

TOP

回复 9# 的帖子

1. an effective way , not a effective way

2. 孔夫子说的practise 和后面提到的fact可以等同吗?偶不是很清楚。

3. 个人感觉Galileo的例子非常好,很切题

4. 第三段 our goal is not grasp the basic rules应改为 our goal is not to grasp the basic rules

5. 总体感觉TSONG同学的文章写的是理论和实践的关系,不是概念和事实的关系,个人感觉这两个还是不太一样,不知对否

祝TSONG同学考试成功,呵呵!

TOP

刚写的,一个多小时,写完后觉得很不踏实。请大家和老师多提宝贵意见

Ideas,concepts,which one is more important to students?Different people have different minds.Many students are greatly convinced that understanding ideas and concepts is perfect stytle of study for them while others hold the opinion that learning facts are important to them.As far as I am concerned,the method of understanding concepts and ideas for study has liitle appealed to me.Virtually,learning facts are suitable for our students'study and do more good than harm to the procedure of study.So it's sagacious to chose learning factors.Among countless factors which inflence leraning factors,there are two conspicuous aspects  as follows.
For one thing,facts are more understandable to our students than concepts which are seem to be abstract to students.For instance,according to a recent survey of ShanXi University,about 79.8% students thought physics are easier to learn than math on account for there are many experiments in physics classes rather than only formulas in math classes.My friend Jack is a college student,his study didn't very well before,but his biology work is perfect in his class after a lot of experiments now.He said the facts of experiments helped him a lot.These gave him deep impress on the biology knowlege.Among all sorts of learning  methods which are used to learn in our daily study,it's go with out saying that learning facts is the best way for our students.It can make thing  easy to remember.
For another thing,facts can be seen everywhere not only in books as concepts.It can make students learn in any form anywhere.For example,my friend Tom is music lover,he has plenty of mucic knowlege and he can play several instruments.Where all these come from?He said he payed attention to every thing about music in his daily life such as a concert in TV,some music news on newspapers,some singners'records and so on.These facts can help him learn the knowlege of music.To the famillar example of my friend Tom,many examples can be easily found,such as learning football skills from friends during the palying,learning singing skills by doing exercises  follow an famous teacher.Improving speaking skills through talking to others.Obviously,facts are significant to our students,It can help students get konwlege easily.
It would probaly not be too kindly disposed the idea that there is no use to understand concepts and ideas.First and foremost,ideas and concepts are conclusion of facts,It can make people think someting deeply.Besides,concepts are very important to some discipline such like math.Without concepts,students can't work even one problem out.Last but not least,concepts and ideas are something essential,we can make  right decisions depending on them.   
In a word,to chose paying more attention on learning ideas and concepts or facts is something of a delimma to the students because they sometimes are confused by the seemingly merits of learning ideas and concepts and neglect the genuinely good aspects of learning facts.Learning facts not only help students understand knowlege easily but also make them learn in any form and everywhere.  Why some students deem understanding concepts and ideas as the optimal choice and superior to learning  facts is really beyond me.For the reasons presented above,I strongly commit to the notion that learning facts,but not learning concepts and ideas.

TOP

回复 29# 的帖子

1.Ideas,concepts,which one is more important to students? 题目是在问ideas and concepts, 与facts哪个更重要。你的第一句似乎是想引起下面ideas 与concepts的比较。
2.拼写错误,第一段stytle---style, liitle---Little,chose---choose,inflence---influence,leraning---learning,
3As far as I am concerned,the method of understanding concepts and ideas for study has liitle appealed to me.Virtually,learning facts are suitable for our students'study and do more good than harm to the procedure of study.So it's sagacious to chose learning factors总觉得这个地方逻辑关系有些问题,具体说不出该怎么说,不过似乎你的态度不是很清晰的表达给读者,读了第一段后觉得你应该是中立态度的,但是后来发现你在支持FACTS。
4.For one thing,facts are more understandable to our students than concepts which are seem to be abstract to students这句后面的to students 是不是可以省略了? 感觉有些重复,不过我的语法不好,我不知道这样改会不会错,在让高手给你看看。
5.on account for 改成On account of 是由于的意思
6These gave him deep impress on the biology knowlege,gave前要加have吧
7It can make students learn in any form anywhere, any form 和anywhere 前要有连词,或者有个,号吧.
8.mucic knowlege 这两个拼写都错了,应该是music knowledge 吧,mucic 是化学方面的词,黏酸的,这个意思。singners'records这个要写什么?拼写错了,是歌手的唱片么?singers'  records?  famillar改成familiar,,,konwlege又拼写错了。 probaly 改成probably,someting ---something,such like不知道是不是可以这样表达,建议你最好用such as稳妥些。,to chose 不定式后面应该用choose吧。delimma是想写dilemma么?
9.我有注意小马里说发作文来要标点+空格的形式,这样看着整齐。

Ps你拼写的错误好多,因该多注意些哦,我不是老师也不是高手,不知道我改的对不对,还有感觉的第2个例子有些牵强,你的表达过于中文式,我觉得在例子选择上还有表述方法上要注意。 我就是个不怎么回用例子的人,什么例子也想不出,可能是思维还不过开阔。
个人愚见,如果有不对的地方见谅

[ 本帖最后由 melissa_lee 于 2008-5-3 21:24 编辑 ]

TOP

发新话题