1. 开头比较吸引人，我为啥老是写不出这种attractive的开头呢，反思啊
2. which including whether the university students should be required to take basic science classes even they are not part of the field of the study because they are useful是不是吧because提到前面就是which including whether the university students should be required to take basic science classes because they are useful even they are not part of the field of the study 更通顺一些，个人陋见
3. but not for the reason that he/she is not smart enough, which is proved by all the current remarkable workers.后面这半句看不太懂哦
4. 第四段which including helping them doing better ，应该是include
5. The problem,nonetheless,still has 是不是想表示the problem still exist呢
6. 最后一句有点别扭，但具体哪里说不太清，可能是两个从句有点修饰不清
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