学校学习的LESSON重要还是 学校外的?
按时写完 大改了.....


"Knowledge is power". With the fast develop of the world, lesson, another form of knowledge, people would learn it in a vary way. Nowadays, there is a controversial discussion between whether people should get their most important lessons in school or outside the school. From where I stand, I cling to that people should learn them in the school.


To begin with, people can learn lessons in a proper speed, schedule and quantity. Confucius, the noted educators and philosopher in China, convinced that”People should study in a right method”. When people are six or seven years old, school teaches them some learning skills, such as reading, speaking, writing and so on. As time passed, people can learn some advanced lessons and knowledge from school, Chinese, English, mathematics, physics. After many years of study, with sufficient knowledge and intelligence it is time to go to college. Specialized subject, the important lesson in future work, people begin their further education. All of study all done step by step. Hardly can I imagine that without these systemic school lessons would we still enjoy the diversity and colorful of the world.


Furthermore, school lesson exert a decisive effect on people's characteristic, even the future life. Teenage years, people will greatly affected by environment. When we are working on science subject, long time spend on one complicated problem can greatly cultivate our independent thinking ability; in the liberal arts lesson, we are roaming in five thousand years history of China; we strengthen our critical thinking ability; the more time taking parts in colorful activity, the creativity developed. These are essential characteristic in our life. On the contrary, according to a recent survey conducted by C.C.O. (China Campus Organization), points out that more than 60 percents of people who have not go to high school or college are  lack of these characteristic. Results them live in a arduous life. It is no doubt that school lesson is irreplaceable in people's life.


Admittedly, outside school lessons, to some extent, may have their own merits, such as people can gain working experience, the independent ability, and the adventure experience. However, school lessons have more merits as systemic study, help people cultivate their characteristic and have a better life in future. Obviously, we can draw the conclusion that the merits of school lessons overshadowed the advantages of outside school lessons, so I still cling to my point.





修改后的
"Knowledge is power". With the fast development of the world, lesson, another form of knowledge, people would learn(learning) it in variety way. Nowadays, there is a controversial discussion between whether people should get their most important lessons in(from) school or outside the school. From where I stand, I cling to that people should learn them in school.

To begin with, school course ensure people learn lessons in a proper speed, schedule and quantity. Confucius, the noted educator(qu)s and philosopher in China, convinced that“People should study in right method”. When people are six or seven years old, school teaches them some learning skills, such as reading, speaking, and writing. As time passed, people can learn some advanced lessons and knowledge from school, like Chinese, English, mathematics, physics. After that, the sufficient knowledge and intelligence make people able to receive further education,
specialized subject. All of study all seted step by step. Hardly can I imagine that without these systemic school lessons would we still enjoy the diversity and colorful(fascination).都是名词！

Furthermore, school lesson exert a decisive effect on cultivating personal ability, evenfuture life. When we work
on science subject, spending a long time on complicated problems can greatly enhance our independent thinking ability; in the liberal arts lesson, we are roaming in five thousand years history of China; we can strengthen our critical thinking ability; the more time taking parts in colorful activities, the more creativity are developed. These are essential abilities in our life. On the contrary, teenagers will(are)readily affect by the detrimental aspects of environment. According to a recent survey conducted by C.C.O. (China Campus Organization), points out that more than 60 percents of people who have not go to high school or college are live in a hard life. Arduous life comes from lacking school lesson. It is no doubt that school lesson is irreplaceable in people's life.


Admittedly, outside school lessons, to some extent, may have their own merits, such as people can gain working experience, the independent ability, and the adventure experience. However, school lessons have more merits as systemic study, help people cultivating their abilities and enjoy better life in future. Obviously, we can draw the conclusion that the merits of school lessons overshadowed the advantages of outside school lessons, so I still cling to my point.


[ 本帖最后由 wuhao5217195 于 2008-6-3 23:44 编辑 ]

可否指出一些呢?

谢了呵~~
1 那是手误呵....
2  learned in a vary way?
3 get from?
4 哪个短语错了呢?

我意思是
2 改成  
lesson, another form of knowledge, learned in vary way.
下面的还有什么错误没呵?