136. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing a game is fun only when you win. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I don't agree with the idea that playing a game is fun only when you win . You play games for fun maybe, but if you play just for win then it won't be a funny thing.

There are many reasons we choose to play a game, maybe for relaxing ourselves. For example , we may play basketball, play the cards, table tennis and so on . Sometimes, we just want to spend a happy day with someone who share the common interests with us. If we find it fun only when we win, that would be a horribly thing sometimes, we may make other people feel uncomfortable.  

You can't  be the winner every time, if you feel happy when you win and feel sad when you are lost, that would be not good for you, for you will lost the fun for playing a game, the consequence never could be the most important thing, the progress is more important, you should feel more fun when you do it no matter what the result is. If you just concentrate on playing the game itself you will find it so much fun , you will feel happy to playing the game and  really enjoy it.

Always we play a game for fun, and to relieve the stress we get from work and study, if we find fun only when we win  that would mean that only we can win every time that we can get fun to play a game, and when we are playing a game we have to try our best to be the winner, if not ,we will feel depressive and gradually we lost the interesting in playing the game, that would be not good. The meaning of playing the game is meaningless.  

So I think it is not wise to get fun just from becoming a winner, the progress is much more important. Try to find the real interest of a game and share the happiness with your friends, you will find more fun during playing the game. Result is important but it is not the most important, you can not miss a forest just because of a little tree in front of you. Relax yourself by play a game you really enjoy not for the end of the game but the way you play it, you need not care about the result just play for fun, feel pleasure, and you will get the true meaning of  playing the game.

Not for a winner, but for the player, just be fun.

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I don't agree with the idea that playing a game is fun only when you win . You play games for fun maybe, but if you play just for win then it won't be a funny thing.

There are many reasons we choose to play a game, maybe for relaxing ourselves. For example , we may play basketball, play the cards, table tennis and so on . Sometimes, we just want to spend a happy day with someone who share the common interests with us. If we find it fun only when we win, that would be a horribly thing sometimes, we may make other people feel uncomfortable.  

You can't  be the winner every time, if you feel happy when you win and feel sad when you are lost, that would be not good for you, for you will lost the fun for playing a game, the consequence never could be the most important thing, the progress is more important, you should feel more fun when you do it no matter what the result is. If you just concentrate on playing the game itself you will find it so much fun , you will feel happy to playing the game and  really enjoy it.

Always we play a game for fun, and to relieve the stress we get from work and study, if we find fun only when we win  that would mean that only we can win every time that we can get fun to play a game, and when we are playing a game we have to try our best to be the winner, if not ,we will feel depressive and gradually we lost the interesting in playing the game, that would be not good. The meaning of playing the game is meaningless.  

So I think it is not wise to get fun just from becoming a winner, the progress is much more important. Try to find the real interest of a game and share the happiness with your friends, you will find more fun during playing the game. Result is important but it is not the most important, you can not miss a forest just because of a little tree in front of you. Relax yourself by play a game you really enjoy not for the end of the game but the way you play it, you need not care about the result just play for fun, feel pleasure, and you will get the true meaning of  playing the game.

语言使用不灵活。句子形式过于单一，表语从句，宾语从句，独立主格也不难，用上能增色。

词汇贫乏。诸如“I THINK ”这类的词汇能不能换成 I CONSIDER？ THINK初中生就在用，你是去考托福。 NOT GOOD, NOT WISE ,  meaning of playing the game is meaningless 会让考官觉得你没有多少单词存储量。

说服性不强。不要再一个论据上纠缠过多，两三段说一件事会让考官觉得你没有太多理由，是在凑字。文章的结构，论点论据最重要，语言都可以暂时不管，现在写之前用中文列提纲吧。你的文章说玩游戏会让人FEEL HAPPY, RELEASE STRESS, FUN, 本质是一样的。

[ 本帖最后由 半月霜天 于 2008-6-13 21:18 编辑 ]

I don't agree with the idea that playing a game is fun only when you win . You play games for fun maybe, but if you play just for win then it won't be a funny thing. (quite straightforward opening, but I think something "highlight should be added." ex: games can be traced back to prehistoric times, when people simulating battle, such as wrestling and boxing.)

There are many reasons we choose to play a game, maybe for relaxing ourselves（just for relaxing or relax ourselves.）. For example , we may play basketball, play the cards, table tennis and so on . Sometimes, we just want to spend a happy day with someone who share the common interests with us. If we find it fun only when we win, that would be a horribly thing sometimes, we may make other people feel uncomfortable.  

You can't  be the winner every time（everytime）, if you feel happy when you win and feel sad when you are（删） lost（lose）, that would be not good(unnecessary) for you, for（cause） you will lost（lose） the fun for playing a game, the consequence never could be the most important thing, the progress is more important, you should feel more fun when you do it no matter what the result is(此句可删). If you just concentrate on playing the game itself（删） you will find it so much fun , you will feel happy to（when） playing the game and  really enjoy it. （the consequence comes from the progress, if you could enjoy yourself when playing the game, the result can be omitted.）

Always we play a game for fun, and to relieve the stress we get from work and study, if we find fun only when we win  that would mean that(删) only we(删) can（删） win every time that（改为逗号） we can get fun to play a game, and when we are playing a game we have to try our best to be the winner, if not ,we will feel depressive and gradually we lost(lose) the interesting（interest） in playing the game, that would be not good(terrible). The meaning of playing the game is meaningless.  

So I think it is not wise to get fun just from becoming a winner, the progress is much more important(carries more weight). Try to find the real interest of a game and share the happiness with your friends, you will find more fun during playing the game. Result is important but it is not the most important, you can not miss a forest just because of a little tree in front of you（= =?这句话与本文的关系是？）. Relax yourself by play a game you really enjoy not for the end of the game but the way you play it, you need not care about the result just play for fun, feel pleasure, and you will get the true meaning of  playing the game. （life without games is just like fish without water, and games without fun is like flowers without sunshine. So, go ahead, have a good time and enjoy yourself, who cares the result!）

Not for a winner, but for the player, just be fun.
(Be happy, be fun and be fearless, that's the motto of a game company. Be a player instead of a winner, you will make more difference.)

[ 本帖最后由 半月霜天 于 2008-6-13 21:54 编辑 ]

谢谢大家，好感动呀，继续加油 o(∩_∩)o...