为了更好帮助小马会员攻克口语，秋姐开通了“在线批改”专栏。
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[ 本帖最后由 秋姐 于 2008-8-29 07:00 编辑 ]

; K) U8 B$ G5 h2 \强烈支持！！2 D; k+ L9 y& y2 W
秋姐不要怕，我是女滴

在原来的帖子我是沙发现在不是了) b' ]: r4 T8 `2 O! |1 _5 Y
对不起我先水一个
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怎么这么好啊
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- p3 n4 o/ U$ O( w7 [. f; L" O秋姐给我看看这两篇有没有太牵强  一个是我最想学skill  还有一个最珍贵的礼物  还有就是decision我也想用这个 我就是把你的文章开头给弄来了
2 o0 [6 O+ f5 K/ N我总觉得我这个太牵强了  
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I would like to learn how to play the guitar. Now I can’t play a musical instrument （背景介绍）,so this would be a new skill for me. It would be a good skill to have because I could take my guitar to parties and play music for my friends and me. I will appreciate my own music.  It can relax my mind. I always have a great efficiency on study after appreciating music. By playing the guitar, I can learn something about rhythm, which teaches me how to balance the complicated situation. Playing the guitar is worldwide language without any translation, by play the guitar we can share their emotion with different people around the world. That is way I want to learn.* ?, q* M; X& |
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* H8 u" G+ m' s3 k- AI would like to talk about guitar I bought 2 years ago. Even though I spent my first salary on it, I felt happy. I always take my guitar to parties and play music for my friends and me. I often appreciate my own music. It can relax my mind. I always have a great efficiencyon study after appreciating music. By playing the guitar, I can learn something about rhythm, which teaches me how to balance the complicated situation. Playing the guitar is worldwide language without any translation, by play the guitar we can share their emotion with different people around the world. That is way I think guitar is special subjects for me.

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原帖由 duoduo1991 于 2008-8-29 10:33 发表 3 l6 E: _( K2 z6 P" i; G
在原来的帖子我是沙发现在不是了* M& q( a7 ^$ Q: ?* n
对不起我先水一个
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秋姐给我看看这两篇有没有太牵强  一个是我最想学skill  还有一个最珍贵的礼物  还有就是decision我也想用这个 我就是把你的 ...

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I would like to learn how to play the guitar. Now I can’t play a musical instrument (背景介绍) ,so this would be a new skill for me. It would be a good skill to have because 【I could take my guitar to parties and play music for my friends and me. I will appreciate my own music, which can relax my mind. I always become more productive at work after appreciating music. By playing the guitar, I can learn something about rhythm, which teaches me how to cope with the complicated situation. Music is the universal language without any translation, by playing the guitar we can share emotion with different people around the world. 】That is why I want to learn it.
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I would like to talk about the guitar I bought 2 years ago. Even though I spent my first month's salary on it, I felt happy. 【I always take my guitar to parties and play music for my friends and me. I will appreciate my own music, which can relax my mind. I always become more productive at work after appreciating music. By playing the guitar, I can learn something about rhythm, which teaches me how to cope with the complicated situation. Music is the universal language without any translation, by playing the guitar we can share emotion with different people around the world. 】That is why I think guitar is a special subject for me.7 f5 A8 m1 [- }& ~' Z- U2 }
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【】细节套用的方法不错。
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[ 本帖最后由 秋姐 于 2008-8-29 12:53 编辑 ]

啊，，，这个太费劲了，，实在是不知道要怎么写，，
) g2 [8 k  Q9 q6 y4 W7 s/ Lthe most important characteristic for a team member* m7 S4 U# ^2 B4 Y2 j6 A! h
In my point of view, the most important quality to be a team member is the ability to communicate effectively.
9 k# T% Q7 |& F! k& Q% _3 XBy communicate effectively, I mean, a team member should be talented in both speaking and listening skills. Speaking effectively means presenting views clearly and concisely. This will contribute to the overall efficiency of the team. On the other hand, effective listening show respect to others and promotes harmony within the team.
/ k2 k+ k1 ]$ Q" l" IAs you may know, effective interpersonal communication is vital to the smooth functioning of any task team. Therefore, a team member must be talented in interpersonal skills, including both speaking and listening skills.
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[ 本帖最后由 popcornwl 于 2008-8-29 20:30 编辑 ]

秋姐请问可不可以发录音上来给你听啊？

秋姐啊,你是神,明天开始写模版,要麻烦你了

喜欢跟室友一起住还是单独住
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First of all,roomates mean good friends.I will never feel lonely and bored if I live with roomates.In our spare time,we could hang out,talk with each other and share our ideas and hobbies.All of these can help me relax and relieve the pressure from work and study.
: ^0 g' f2 d% `3 j' SFurthermore,living with roomates could also teach me how to get along with others well,and how to protect my own privacy at the same time.This would help me improve my impersonal and communication skills,which is very important for the future career.

假期休息还是学习
& F0 [  L' ]; g( fThe answer to this question is not definite,depending on personal situation.
7 P: F) E: L2 b- m  c) TAfter a whole semester's study,relaxation is a good choice for many students.But that doesn't mean a waste of  time.They can hang out and communicate with friends,or plan a trip to some cities or somewhere they're longing for.All of these can help them expand horizens and enrich their lives.
- I0 t$ I! d* g9 J2 z, u/ _But as for those who are poor in some subjects,it's better to spend more time studying.Otherwise,they would fall behind their classmates next semester.That might make them unhappy.
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. |3 k4 s7 s6 ?& M写口语段子，写作文都很难，细节部分总是脑子空空的。英语的输出不容易唉...

谢谢 秋姐  !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!