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Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.  

confucius, the greatest and most influential philosopher and educator of ancient China, commented:"practicing exercise is beneficial(conducive) to the development of phychological and physiological level of people staying in differnt age stage". There days, however, there is a hot  issue about  whether young children should take the majority of their time to exercise. Personally, I believe that moderate practcing sports help the development of children in different facets.

For starters, children practicing sports surely embraces  better quality of body than those do not. Furthermore, it can help the development of musular and bone of children. According to the study conducted by NanKai Health Center, as the top human genetics organization of China, the doctors investigated 600 subjects as their age range from 9 to 16 years old. The result of research showed that the children practicing sports action have stronger body with  performing energetic states in their daily life. In contrast to,  the children lacking of exercise often take sick and can not focus their concentration on study. Therefore, we can not imagine the serious result of our human being without Practicing sports.

At same time,  sports also teach our children how to hold their own responsibility and perseverance spirits. For instance, when children take part in a sccocer game,  their team falls behind one score. In countdown, they get a penalty that can change the game results if it can be shotted in the goal. In this time, individuals need to perform responsibility and withstand pressure to do it. This curcial situation can teach children how to face the presssure and Challenges. As a result, if he or she fail to score,  they will learn how to face the negative result. It is very helpful for the development children.

All in all, the sports can be trace back to primitive period as Our ancestors in order to get foods and espcape from dangerous situation. Consequently, it impels our  the evolvment of human being from low-grade to advanced stages. Therefore, although today children are very busy with having a great number of homeworks need to be done, they should spend the plenty of time to practice exercise.

本来想写三段没时间了 哎！

Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.   

Since the competing of the NBA team ROCTET and KING in Beijing of 2005, I began to love basketball, and hope to become a good basketball player. Currently, the issue that whether students should pay vast amounts of time in playing basketball receives argument likewise, while some people think the major work of a student is study, do lots of sports will spend their plenty of time. As far as I am concerned, this statement is as absurd as it is harmful.

First of all, playing basketball helps us understand the true meaning of teamwork. Michael Jordan, the greatest and most influential basketball player in NBA, once saying: Talent wins game, but teamwork wins championships. When he entered NBA in 1984, Jordan’s extraordinary athletic skills had not help the Bulls win a single title for 6 years. After the introduction of Triangle offense by his coach, Phil Jackson, he realized the importance of cooperation. In the following years, with the excellent teamwork with his mates, Pippen and Rodman, he helped Chicago Bulls won 6 NBA championship titles. Even today, as a totally funs of Michael Jordan, I still appreciated the spirit of teamwork and hope one day I will become a splendid player just like Jordan as soon as possible.

In addition, do a lot of sports help me defense disease. I always suffered in sick in my childhood. It is a bad feeling when lying in bed, eating pills three times a day with a powerless body. At the age of 12, my mother suggests me participated in a swimming class near my home. After painstaking effort day by day in the swimming pool, I understand how to survive in water with breast stroke. From then on, I surprisingly found that I had already got rid of any diseases. If you can see it, you will understand it more deeply.

However, each coin has two sides, spending so much time in sports also have its own demerit. Some students get a low point in their final examination due to fascinated with playing basketball in the playground. Nevertheless, the advantage of practicing sports will carries more weight than that of disadvantage of it. So the most striking conclusion is obvious.

Take Michael Jordan and myself asides, there are millions of examples, but I have to come into the endlessly. As I mentioned above, we can easily come to the conclusion: practicing sports have so many advantages. In fact, not only do I prefer to do sports 2 hours per day, but also prefer more and more people will take part in the athletic meeting in my school as soon as possible.


写得肯定没A兄的好,恨拍吧 T T

孔子说过这种话么....
In contrast to,  the children lacking of exercise often take sick and can not focus their concentration on study.
这边加了to就错了   in contrast to 后面跟sth.
写得很好，我的建议的是可以写一下锻炼的一点点的不好，而不是全盘支持，写过度锻炼会影响学习，所以我们要适量，因为你前面写了moderate，所以你应该写处不moderate会怎么样
个人建议
另外有些拼写错误，建议把文章粘贴到word看看

this statement is as absurd as it is harmful.   
写得有错误，如果这么写得话变成了statement是harmful的了
but I have to come into the endlessly
endlessly成了名词？
很好的整合了二分法和 SY同学的特点
非常不错

[ 本帖最后由 whereiswc 于 2007-10-3 22:50 编辑 ]

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...和尚这2句都是参照S.Y讲义写的...寒~~~~~~

呵呵,很支持

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原帖由 TOEFL759_198 于 2007-10-4 00:09 发表
...和尚这2句都是参照S.Y讲义写的...寒~~~~~~

我下次请教一下SY同学...