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求拍,为什么总是提高不了

求拍,为什么总是提高不了

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why people go to museum

   people attend college or university for many reasons,no matter how many reasons,no doubtly that they can get benefit form university study,it can increse them konwledge ,they can hunt a good job if get the degree also can make dearm come ture.
   firstly,every person have to face the society no matter how go to university or not,any company want to employ talent or have high degree also have a plenty of konwledge,if a person  go to university,the person can learn a lot of konwledge about some fields,maybe can became the talent of some fields aslo expanse vision,the person can find some opptunities to do some part time job for gain experiecese.
   secondly,to selcet a university can help person to make dearm become true,if the person want to became a doctor,who selcet a medical school to study,the person can hunt a job in hospital after graduat,maybe will get the president of hospital after a few years.
   meanwhile,some person go to university not only for learning konwledge,they need make a lot of friend also have decent background friend,for instance,some person's major is MBA,they need make a lot of friend on bussiness,IT,finance and so on.that is for career in furture,also good for them do some bussiness
   meanwhile,some person go to university not only for learning konwledge,they need make a lot of friend also have decent background friend,for instance,some person's major is MBA,they need make a lot of friend on bussiness,IT,finance and so on.that is for career in furture,also good for them do some bussiness


要提高哪些?词汇?还是...时间就剩三星期了

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为什么题目是关于museum的,而写的是university呢?

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   people attend college or university for many reasons,no matter how many reasons,no doubtly that they can get benefit(benefits) form university study,it can increse them(their) konwledge ,they can hunt a good job if they get the degree ,also they can make dearm come ture.
   firstly,every person have( has) to face the society no matter how(whether) going to university or not,any company wants to employ talent or ones have high degree also have a plenty of konwledge(句法错误,很难改...),if a person  goes to university,the person(用he代替比较好) can learn a lot of konwledge about some fields,maybe can became(become) the talent of

(in) some fields aslo expanse vision,the person can find some opptunities to do some part time job for gain experiecese.
偌大的一个论坛,北工大的校友咋那么少涅= =
在我20岁的时候, make a big difference!
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改了前两段
感受:语法错误较多,你用also的时候很容易错,值得你注意一下
另外没specific的例子
建议:慎用also,在人称的时候尽量用复数来避免语法错误,比如a person能改成people,这样的话就不用考虑第三人称单数后的动词是否要加S了
偌大的一个论坛,北工大的校友咋那么少涅= =
在我20岁的时候, make a big difference!
几个连接(请点击):
如何复习新托福
资源下载汇总贴
加试问题及机经
08年考试时间统计专帖

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拿作文放到那个网站上的机器上改,分数很低 ,为什么李笑来说要写3分以下的作文很难,简直就是忽悠,网上改的分是不是能说明考试的时候就得多少分啊?就是那个官方的网站

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哪个网站哪个机器?那个软件不是收费的么?
那个软件其实是挑错的软件,好象叫什么E-RATER吧
语法错误多就这样
LXL说,批改的时候都是人批的,而且不是给你挑错,是找闪光点
偌大的一个论坛,北工大的校友咋那么少涅= =
在我20岁的时候, make a big difference!
几个连接(请点击):
如何复习新托福
资源下载汇总贴
加试问题及机经
08年考试时间统计专帖

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感觉需要有例子``比如可以举一个BILL GATES的例子说明在大学能认识很多朋友对你事业有帮助```````````
抽象说理是没有300字的!!!
牛人不要拍我``

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写作我觉得是4向里面最难提高的, 多联系把,

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这些天练了些,把模版套了套,用词换了换,小语法毛病改了改,感觉有些长进,但是大长进是没有了,内容就是不够丰富,我想短时间也提高不了了,还有10天就考了,不知道还能不能学两招吐血的?
综合作文正在练习中,如果字数不够,会不会影响得分?综合作文除了套模版,不知道还有哪些需要注意的精华?

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我考试前三天的时候买了一本李笑来老师的高分作文,对我自己作文思路的启发很有帮助
综合作文字数要求是150-225,应该不会不够吧,如果连150都写不上那肯定作文就有问题了
主要要注意的是综合部分其实考察的是你听的能力和你笔记的能力
偌大的一个论坛,北工大的校友咋那么少涅= =
在我20岁的时候, make a big difference!
几个连接(请点击):
如何复习新托福
资源下载汇总贴
加试问题及机经
08年考试时间统计专帖

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