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最弱项出击。独立写作一篇。

最弱项出击。独立写作一篇。

15. Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

When I was a child, my family moved frequently because of the nature of my father's job. Accordingly, I have met lots of neighbors, it is conceivable that neighbors have played an important role in my life, which made me know exactly what kind of neighbors could be qualified as good neighbors.

First and the most important is the good and regular daily habit. No one will like to live close to neighbors who has bad even terrible habits. It is really a good way observing how your neighbor deal with the rubbish to judge whether he or she is a good neighbor or not. Qualified neighbors should always classify the different kinds of litters cafelly and put them well at indicated places. On the other hand, bad neighbors used to ignore the rules all the time. Sometimes they could even scatter litters under your windows without any shame.Besides, that could keep quiet at night is also an indispensable good habit of good neighbors. If my neighbors were fond of singing or dancing or holding parties regardless of day or night, either they or I had to move out.

It has been said, "humor creates sunshine days". I can feel pleased and enjoyable if meet neighbors who have sense of humor. It's wonderful. Every one knows that no one can avoid meeting their neighbors occasionally no matter in the morning, at noon or at night. Just say "Hi" sounds chill. However, things will change if we can use little innocent jokes instead of fade greeting words, even try to talk with them, the atmosphere between us may become harmonious and comfortable, which will therefore bring us optimistic situation to face everything of all day.

Sometimes most people express wishes for being honesty to their neighbors, so do I. However, it is obviously hard to request it. After all, neighbors are merely neighbors, not our family members even not our good friends. It is rather rigorous to ask for totally honesty from neighbors. On the other hand, if our neighbors have done something illegal and been witnessed by us, it is also hard for us to shelter them as our relatives.

I really meet too many different neighbors with different habits and characteristics. My experiences lead to my conclusion, that is, good habits are the most important and most essential quality of good neighbors. Sense of humor is another very essential term. If my neighbor could fit them, anything else would I endure.

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嗯。28分30秒,未检查,欢迎大家砍我。。

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第一段出现太多neighbours,建议进行同义替换和代词替换
第二段开头First and the most important is 指带不明确
另外你开头和结尾都说你经历了各种各样的邻居,但是在三点中没有一点有你自己的事例,显得文章非常不specific,这个错误可以是置命的
你可以少写一点,但是写其中一点的时候加入你自己的感受
偌大的一个论坛,北工大的校友咋那么少涅= =
在我20岁的时候, make a big difference!
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谢谢毛毛~~~~~~

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实力不及.在此不做点评...觉得写不不错...阐述类文章一般遵循举现象,说原因,谈感受,论影响,提建议,所以楼上的评论很正确

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是不错....不是不不错....手误

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也谢谢楼上的鼓励~嗯。

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我觉得比我写的好多了,我就总结一下我认为的优点吧!(缺点留给牛人去说了)
开头一段用了自己的经历,显得很有真实感;
后几段观点都挺明显的,例子也不错,但是neighbor这个词好像真的出现的有点多了……
第三个观点,有关honest的,我觉得想法挺好的,但是应该在结尾处总结一下,要不显得很唐突,似乎删了也不会有太大影响!

我是来学习的,说的不好,不要怪我!

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