99. People learn in different ways. Some people learn by doing things; other people learn by reading about things; others learn by listening to people talk about things. Which of these methods of learning is best for you? Use specific examples to support your choice.


Confucius, the most illustrious illustrious educator and philosopher quoted in Analects, as saying “finding a suitable way to get knowledge plays a critical role in your life.” There is a severe debate about which is the best way to learn things in the competitive society. The way I see it there is no clear-cut answer to it. It depends on what information I need to get and which phase of life I’m live in,
For the starters, people can gain good characteristics via learning by themselves. I think Arenas is a perfect example in point. One year ago, I know Arenas’s career from a famous advertisement of Adidas. I know that when Arenas was a rookie in NBA, his talent didn’t discovered by people around him. He even stayed on bench during his first 40 games. His coach thought he would play 0 games in NBA. But Arenas didn’t lost faith. He was just practicing shooting, defense and free-throw shooting. Finally, he proved himself. Now he is undoubtedly the hottest guard in the league and the leader of Washington Wizards. Arenas’s coach and teammates don’t give him enough help. His success is attributed to himself. From Arenas’s example, we vividly know learning by doing things gives us many personalities, such as persistence, perseverance, willing to win and charisma.
Although gaining knowledge along offers us some advantages, learning with other’s help also does good benefits to us too. Xiao qiang, my best friend, is a best example. Xiao qiang has a keen interest in reading books. He likes reading various kinds of books rather than confined in catenae. He told me that he loved to submerge in the ocean of books for the reason that it provided him mental nutrition. National Geography opened out the mysteries and legends of mother earth .Science laid out the remarkable achievements human being made recently. The frictions and lyrics also show us the bright side of human nature. Xiao qiang has become famous scholar in China. Can you deny the positive effect books made in the way of his success? The answer is obvious.
Last but not the least, learning by listening other talking about things is also a wise way of studying. Listening to eldership helps us obtain life experiences, while listening to juniors offers fresh conception. Not only real world but also literature works abounds with perfect example. I vividly remember the movie “Forrest Gump” I watched when I was 12. Gump is a retarded kid with an IQ of 75. He gets discrimination because he is clumsy. But, Gump always remembers what his mama says “life is like a box of chocolates, you never know what you’re gonna get.” So he always keeps calm, concentrating on what he’s doing, never distracting by his surroundings. So finally, Gump has it made in nearly every activity he engages in. What his mama says give Gump gigantic power to overcome all the difficulties. Undeniable listening to other people’s talking is also a good way to learning.
In conclusion, choosing an appropriate way to learn is very critical. We can get good personalities by doing things, get knowledge by reading, and get true meaning of life by listening to other people. All the ways above are clever choices. When you find your way to learn, all you need to do is dedicate all your time and energy to be successful.

楼主用了it depends的策略。笑来的那个185上很多都这样写的。我上的是教主的课，他告诉我们这种方法慎用。所以我还没有写过这种方法的文章。我下去也试试看。
我的水平不高，我觉得楼主写的还是不错的
1“Confucius, the most illustrious illustrious educator and philosopher quoted in Analects ”为什么要用两个illustrate？
2“There is a severe debate ”语法错误
3I’m live in 老师说要用书面的写法
4第二段用了多次I KNOW 考虑换一下别的表示方法
5He was just practicing shooting, defense and free-throw shooting 用复数好些
6”learning with other’s help also does good benefits to us too“  also和too重复
7reason that it provided him mental nutrition “nutrition”用复数吧
8“Not only real world but also literature works abounds with ”主谓一致问题
9He gets discrimination because he is clumsy 我觉得GET这种词少用哦 可用suffer（可能这个词也不是很高级，我水平有限 ）
10 “In conclusion, choosing an appropriate way to learn is very critical. We can get good personalities by doing things, get knowledge by reading, and get true meaning of life by listening to other people. All the ways above are clever choices. When you find your way to learn, all you need to do is dedicate all your time and energy to be successful”get 用 的也太多了，换accumulate， obtain， acquire 等词，还有我觉得最后一段一定要强调一个观点 就是在不同的情况下有不同的选择，这样文章会很有说服力
11 有少量语法错误和拼写错误，就不一一指出了。

以上是我的拙见，第一次给别人改，我水平也不高，牛人看了不要嘲笑我的肤浅啊

谢谢``````感动死我了```

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[ 本帖最后由 小三三 于 2007-10-10 00:53 编辑 ]

一看就是SHIYU的学生啊......看来我们都是同一个掌门人教出来的...你把SHIYU的要求贯彻的满彻底的...不过感觉自己的感受还是写少了,你可以减掉一个事例而增加一点感受.给你推荐一个结尾换掉后面有点土的部分....There is no consensus among people as to .....再接上．．．会好一点

记得段落之间要空行
看的人家很类

就是有个小小的疑问，大家都用差不多的HOOK开头，会不会撞车呀？
我觉得写得不错，比我好多了，观点也很清楚！
但是排版真的不太好看~~