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Fastfood time

Fastfood time,the hotest description be used in this time.yes,we are not difficult to find, that more and more people espacially young are accustomed to make life easier. The most remarkable symbol must be change of diet habit,food has become easier to prepare.Andnow,I’d like to express some of my statements about this change.

Honest,I can not deny to say that I must can be one of beneficiaries in fastfood cultrue,supermarket and cafeteria make life more efficiency.To me,before,the huge pressure of work and unending assignments made my life complicated,the most enjoyable activity when I back home to me everyday must be lying on bed and have a big relaxation.but,unfountunatly,preparing a meal in smoky lampblack became my daily procedure.This thing absolutly spoiled my last and alittle bit of enjoyment everyday.So,I decided to stop continue such procedure istead of having fastfood from lastmonth.And to my surprise,just cost some money can make my life splendid,everyday after hardwork I don’t need to worry about wether it has fresh materials to buy or not in supermarket.Except that,I can go with several friends and find some elegant resturants to share dainty.Acrually,it really made me feel cozy while I was sharing something tasty.

However,despite fastfood have diversified merits,it aslo brought some unexpected consquences.For instance ,lack of balance of nutrition .As we see
part of resturant foods are found that contain over-high calorie which make body gather flesh.Besides , in taking some of over-greasy foods suchas fried chicken,hamburger and potatochips is also a major cause leading toheart disease,high blood pressure and other fatal diseases.Meanwhile ,some of fastfood might be unhealthyful because they’re not thoughtly washed.
What’s more,I think fastfood also weaken the emotion between your family, especially to the oldpeople in a family.Take my grandpa and grandma for example,they were retied about 10 years ago.so,everyday except hangout in a certaintime,they almost stay at home with nothing can do.Unfortunately,every young rarely come to visit them cause of busy working.Before,we were made the Thursday in to be family reunion date.at that day ,whatever how busy we are, both have to reunite in grandpa’s family and do some cooks for them.But now,things changed,laugh and happy of self-cooking just became sences of memory.Family reunoin have be insteaded of resteruant feast.Sitting in the luxuriant chair in different restaurants I can not find yesterday happyness from oldmen’s eye any more.

At last,in my apinion,fastfood certainly has their advantages,but we should choose fastfood depend on different time,maybe it fit for one yourself or with some old fiends,but not means to your family.

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