刚开始练习的2篇,请版主忽略
还有一个月就考了,最近才开始练习,请尽情指出不足的地方,尤其是结构,论述方面的问题,谢谢!
第一篇:
In the past few decades,40 percent of the old cities are turned into the modern city.Saving old city has been passed on the table for several years but still with less attention.Some people consider it as an option for the development of a city just because it is not necessary for the modern city development.On the other hand,many researchers find most of the old cities have much more active economy in recent years,especially in tour.I think saving the old cities is not only necessary in economy but also in civilization.
Old cities have the most historical buildings,which is a sign of a city.Without these buildings,these cities would lose their most bright and specific color in the world,which would bring them into a place where over millions of cities standing up with no characteristic. Currently,if people go to Jinlian,which is the oldest city in north Zhejiang,which is a province of china,looking for some old buildings that have been built for more than five hundred years ago,the result would be a number that you could count just with your fingers.
Old cities are the source of history education.No one can deny this fact that old buildings which has been built for several hundred years,is the best live specimen for a children to know the historical moment of a period exactly.Back in high school,when I was studying a period of Ming Dynasty in china history,our teacher took us to a city which had some building during that period.As we saw the buildings stood up in front of us,we are so exciting of seeing them so we could imagine how glory the Ming Dynasty was.
Additional,old cities are extremely attractive to the tourists because they have the most characteristic buildings in the world. Jinlian,which I have been described before,by the changes of the it,tourists are getting less because the buildings that they want to see are disappeared or changed into a modern building.With the result of the collapse of touring economy,this city became a normal one in the big province in china,and only depended on the industry,which is not fitting it cause its geology.
However,modern city has its own advantages,such as modern industry,high quality of modern common life,high technology which brings us a high efficiency of work.
Despite all of these advantages that modern city brings us,nothing could compare with the history and civilization which old city has,because one day we lost them,we will never find them again.
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第二篇:
Building a new restaurant would be incredibly exciting for me and my neighborhood because we have been expecting for this for a long time.
Building the new restaurant will bring us much more convenience that we expected all the time. In the past, we have to drive or take a taxi to downtown which takes more than 1 hour to go to a restaurant for meeting friends or eating with family. This will cost much more time during Thanks Giving, Christmas or any other holidays because of the traffic jam. Sometimes we go out much earlier but still couldn’t get arrived on time. One time I was going to have dinner with my boss and discuss something about our project. That was a big day because I was stuck in the traffic for 3 hours and my boss got so anger that cost me more than 1 hour to apologize. Therefore, with building of this new restaurant, we will no longer have such awkward story.
A new restaurant will also expedite the commerce around our community. As it used to be, our community has merely few stores and don’t have even 1 supermarket. Every time we try to buy the whole stuff for our Christmas party or such parties, we have to spend a lot of time on the way over as I mentioned before. In addition, it is quite hard to find a job here, so we also have to travel 5 miles away for work every day. Children have lack of sleeping time and couldn’t get attention on class. Adults don’t sleep well and couldn’t get their job down well. A new restaurant is built, meanwhile we will have a better commercial circumstance, so we will have more opportunities to get a job.
On the other hand, building a big restaurant will cause more air pollution, so we won’t breath the fresh and clean air that it used to be. But it couldn’t compare the advantages that building a restaurant would bring us. Plus, as we all realize that nature is the most important thing for human to keep, people who recently built restaurants have already considered of the effect that it may cause. So they did some efficient work to lower the effect to the environment.
Current people couldn’t’ live without the restaurant. It gives them the food that they could not get done in home and also give them a nice place to meeting with people for a exhilarating conversation. Building one will fulfill our needs for living because it will be much more convenience, which is one of the most important thing of modern world.
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因为刚开始练,所以把注意力集中在了结构和论述上,希望大家多在这方面提意见,表达的很Baby,暂时管不了这么多了
今后一个月我准备每天写一篇,本周先把握好结构,下周开始注意词汇的使用
麻烦大家了,感激不尽!
[ 本帖最后由 hys17 于 2007-11-4 09:20 编辑 ]
