Is it more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics.
  

When it comes to the debatable discussion that whether the history and literature is more important than the science and mathematics. Some people support this point for that people can learn the experience from the story our ancestors have experienced. Others argue against it because they think our world is composed by the science and mathematics. As far as I am concerned, I hold the support with former one .I will explain my reasons.

Compared with the science and mathematics, the history and literature show us what we should do and what we should not. A good case in point is that we know so many wars in the history of revolution of human beings. The World War One, World War Two as well as so many fierce battles which deprive countless innocent lives. A great deal of people died and countless wealth became the ash. Shouldn’t we think more deeply about ourselves? Shouldn’t the lessons we learned from the history act as a example we must not follow? If we look back to the history river, we may not spend too much money on military competition and create the nuclear weapon today.

The history and literature not only tell us about the experience but also gives us so many mental enjoyment .For example, from the poem, the novel and any other styles of literature, we can laugh, we can cry, we can show pity about the girl who sells the firework in the fairy, we can also be angry about the crucial beast in the fable. So much spirit wealth can help us relax and relieve the pressure the pressure from the hard work and study as well as accompany us when we are lonely.

And compared with the history and literature, the science and mathematics act as a less important role when construct and refine the spirits of human. They may be more strict and rigid to the common persons.

Generally speaking, taking into the account of all these factors, I strongly think that the history and literature play a more vital role to human beings.
   
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Is it more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics.
  

When it comes to the debatable discussion that whether the history and literature is more important than the science and mathematics（用word看了下，第一句画的绿线线，可能有语法错误，但我没有看出来）. Some people support this point for that people can learn the experience from the story our ancestors have experienced. Others argue against it because they think our world is composed by the science and mathematics. As far as I am concerned, I hold the support with former one .I will explain my reasons.

Compared with the science and mathematics, the history and literature show us what we should do and what we should not. A good case in point is that we know so many wars in the history of revolution of human beings（人类革命史revolutionary history of people）.such as The World War One, World War Two as well as so many fierce battles which deprived of countless innocent lives. A great deal of people died and countless wealth became the ash. Shouldn’t we think more deeply about ourselves? Shouldn’t the lessons we learned from the history act as an example we must not（not 应该去掉吧，你是不是要表示“难道我们从历史中学到的教训没有为我们树立一个我们必须遵守的例子吗？”所not 加上就相反的意思了。我都绕晕了） follow? If we looked back to the history（historical） river, we may not spend too much money on military competition and create the nuclear weapon today.

The history and literature not only tell us about the experience but also gives(give）us so many mental enjoyment .For example, from the poem, the novel and any other styles of literature, we can laugh, we can cry, we can show pity about the girl who sells the firework in the fairy, we can also be angry about the crucial beast in the fable. So much spirit wealth can help us relax and relieve the pressure，the pressure from the hard work and study as well as accompany us when we are lonely.

And compared with the history and literature, the science and mathematics act as（as要去掉） a less important role when construct and refine the spirits of human. They may be more strict and rigid to the common persons（people）.

Generally speaking, taking into the account of all these factors, I strongly think that the history and literature play a more vital role to human beings.

The World War One, World War Two as well as so many fierce battles which deprive countless innocent lives.
这句话不完整，只有主语和定语从句。
A great deal of people died and countless wealth became the ash.
A great deal of 修饰不可数名词吧？好像是。
So much spirit wealth can help us relax and relieve the pressure the pressure from the hard work and study as well as accompany us when we are lonely.
spirit应该是spiritual，另外多了一个the pressure
And compared with the history and literature, the science and mathematics act as a less important role when construct and refine the spirits of human. They may be more strict and rigid to the common persons.
when construct and refine the spirits of human这一从句可以该为when the effects of constructing and refining the spirits of human are taken into account.另外这一段的第二句有点不够明确
提个建议，更多地体现用词的多样性，也就是所谓的重述语义的技巧——黄金规则三

非常感谢

第一句的从句谓语动词应为复数 不过这不是主要的,and连接2个相同结构所以最好把2个the去掉..
当然这也不是主要的 最主要的是第一个词when,引导时间状语从句放句首我咋没看到逗号捏,简单的说..你自己翻译一下就知道了..翻译成中文照样属成分残缺的病句

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