For instance, my friend jack who is an economic professor told me that since going to the movies was an experience that usually precedes or comes directly after having a meal, many other recreational places，such as restaurants, cafés and bars，would definitely spring up around the theater.

我写的作文里一句话，我是想举个例子，不知道语法是不是有错误，谢谢指导

我认为后半句与前面的因果关系连接不是很恰当,而且两个that是不是不太好。
无修改意见。

many other recreational places，such as restaurants, cafés and bars，would definitely spring up around the theater. 后半句什么意思?

我想问最重点的是：时态是否有问题啊，谢谢，

我想问最重点的是：时态是否有问题啊，谢谢，

时态无问题，写的不错～

谢谢，兄台，好热心啊，呵呵

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