His father always spent more than he earned and even was sent to jail because of unpaid debt
个人觉得用even 不对，应该改为eventually
It was absolutely that ....absolutely后面怎么没词了？
还有Charls Dickens的童年遭遇和parent not intellegent to make dicision似乎没有什么必然联系啊
且，第三段开头的however很奇怪，难道和前文不是顺承关系？Bill Gates drop out of school 和permitted to make decisions themselves有什么关系，你知道他父母permit了吗？
优点楼上的各位都说了，我就想说每段的论证一定要根据每段的主题句论述
finally,个人观点，经供参考
