9. Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

With advanced road system, abundant job opportunities and high salary, some people hold the opinion that living in a big city is superior to living in a small town. I, however prefer to live in a town. Because I think that life in a small town is more comfortable.

For starters, the environment in a small town is more attractive and fit for people to live. Without less chemical plants and manufacture factories, the ecosystem in small town is well preserved. There is no problem of water pollution or sand storm, which is severe nowadays in big cities, like Beijing. On the contrary, there are beautiful forests full of all kinds of trees, flowers and animals, very broad fields planted abundant foods and spacious space for physical exercise. living in a small town, I will keep pleasure and efficient all day long, and also gain a good health.

Another reason why I advocate the attitude to living in a small town is that transportation there is more convenient. Some people will probably contradict that it is obvious that traffic system is advancer in big cities. It is undeniable. However, the fact they ignored is that there is also the highest density of people. Although having the widest roads and best vehicles, the city still can’t satisfy people’s need. And traffic jams are very common in daily life. Nevertheless, in small towns, there are also broad roads, but only a small amount of people use them. So traffic there is not problem. This way, I can save a lot of time on the road.

There is also a very strong argument for living in small town is that life in small town is cheaper. I observed that everything indispensible to life in city cost money, such as housing, water, electricity and food. Economy is really a pressure living in big city. However, situation in small town is extremely different. A small town occupies a large land but has a small popularity. So there are much space remained for agriculture, with which people there can harvest enough food for survival. Besides, the price of water, housing and electricity there is much cheaper, even free in some area.

All in all, since life in small town is healthier, more convenient and cheaper, I convince that it is wise to live in a small town.

1， very broad fields planted abundant foods
最起码应是：vast farmlands planted with various crops
broad 不能修饰正方形的区域，修饰road则可以。
2，I will keep pleasure and efficient all day long
keep后边一名一形，居心何在？
3，Another reason why I advocate the attitude to living in a small town is that
恶心。advocate极不自然，好像你要为民请命似的。
4，advancer
低级错误，自辨吧。
5，It is undeniable.
It's also undeniable that such BS-like sentences be absent in an eligible composition.
6，用So, And引导的句子极有可能降低你的分数，这一点OG上有明确说明。
7，There is also a very strong argument for living in small town is that life in small town is cheaper.
1）如果你执意想凑字数，可以用a convincible argument
2) 你看看你这个句子的结构
There is also a ... is that clause.
两个句子就这么粘一起了？完，肯定完。
8，I convince that
convince 的意思是“使确信”。 用法：~sb that OR ~sb to do sth.
CONCLUSION：Your article really sucks！If you want to effectively improve your skill, I recommend that you should
First, Keep reading, since the best article should be based upon a sufficient accumulation in reading passages.
Second, Go through your grammar book again, and again, if possible.
最后，文章太烂的话别人是不愿意给你改的，因为大家水平都很有限，常读这种烂文很可能降低自己本身的英语能力。

without less chemical...
反了吧,应该是with less ...
So traffic there is not problem
I observed that everything(Unless you're God)
这样的句子太绝对了啊吧`
楼上说的不错，从基础的慢慢来，不要用一些自己都不明白的词