Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.


As little children, we learn how to walk, how to speak, how to write from our parents. It is no doubt that parents are our earliest teachers. But are parents our best teachers? Different people have different viewpoints. As far as I concerned, parents are not the best teachers to us.
  Firstly, parents cannot be able to teach us everything. Undoubtedly when we are little kids, our parents can teach basic faculties such us walking, running and writing. When we are pupils, our parents can teach us calculating, riding and so on. Even though they are familiar with this knowledge related to such abilities, they can have good commands of them by short-term study and be competent for instructing us. But how can parents be capable of teach their college children? Since college student learn special knowledge, only an expert in a certain field is equal to instruct them. It is not too difficult for one to be a specialist in one or two fields. But you can imagine how difficult for a parent to be special in all fields. It is almost impossible. Therefore, obviously parents aren't the best teaches to their college children.
   Secondly, children can't spend lots of time with their parents as they leave their home to study or work. They would have fewer opportunities to communicate with their parents. Meanwhile, the parents won't instruct how to solve problems. That is to say parents can't teach their children in such condition, instead, that are school teachers or friends or the managers teaching and helping the children to solve problems.
  Moreover, usually the parents' viewpoints are based on their previous experience which might be not applicable to modern situations. For example, supposed I encounter a difficult problem in an environmental class - how we treat the waste water emitted from a chemical factory? In virtue of his knowledge gained in his past years, my father may suggest me using an end- treated method in detail. However, the end-treated method has been washed out for its serious environmental effects. Hence on the contrary, my father advice misguides me. It tells us the parents' suggestions, especially on technical issues, are often incorrect today. So, from this perspective, we can also conclude that parents are not the best teachers.

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But how can parents be capable of teach their college children?
college children 太有趣了,呵呵,有点chinese ,grown-ups如何?
..
最后一个论据十分同意,可以作为最主要的论据详细展开,调整一下段落顺序,使全篇详略得当.
usually the parents' viewpoints are based on their previous experience which might be not applicable to modern situations. .....

But how can parents be capable of teach their college children?应该是capable to吧
Secondly, children can't spend lots of time with their parents as they leave their home to study or work. 我觉得改成after their leaving to study or work比较合适
我也觉得最后一段的例子很好。
顺便问一下，lz什么时候考试？

第一行应该是there is no doubt...
第三行kids不好,是个纯粹的口语词汇
第五行应该是be capable of teaching
第六行college students你没加s;你想说学专门的一门学科,special不是很合适可以用single-field;那个教授有能力用equal也不是很合适,最好是capable/qualified
第七行 But you can imagine how difficult for a parent to be special in all fields. It is almost impossible.这两句话逻辑错误,你如果想说基本上不可能的话,你前面的句子应该是一个肯定父母能同时掌握多门知识的句子(你明白我的意思吧)
第九行spend on sth/(in)doing你那个with用错了,而且as后面最好是they have to leave their homes...
第十行 instruct是vt,后面你没有宾语...应该加them;conditions(你没加s)
第十一行that are school teachers or friends or the managers teaching and helping the children to solve problems. 这个你可能是想强调,但是错了...应该是it is school teachers or friends or the managers who/that teach and help .....
第十二行应该是supposing
13行最好是the knowledge gained ...你的2个his显得重复了
15行 应该是father‘s advise
16行It tells us the parents' suggestions, especially on technical issues, are often incorrect today.这句话很武断，虽然你想表达自己的观点，但是这句话很站不住脚~~~
最后，文章中的college children 我不知道对不对，但是如果改成children in college 就一定对~~~
我只是简单的给你改了一下语法的错误，至于结构和文采方面你还要自己多努力哦~~~

children in college同意ls的这个版本呵
ls must pay much attention to this essay. Give a praise!

改的有点多，鉴于水平不高，仅供参考，有些地方并不是必要改成那样，还有lz最好在第一段有个 summary 对你的几个points。还有最好有个结尾段，否则会很怀疑lz是不是很serious。看着麻烦的话我也把带有标注的修改传上来。希望有点启发

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.


In the early years of our life, parents taught us nearly everything. We learned form mothers’ beautiful tongue; we learned from playing with our fathers. It is undoubted that parents are our first teachers; however, are parents our best teachers? As far as I concern, they are not the best teachers to us.

  First, parents are not well-qualified teachers all the time. When we were very young, parents taught us basic skills such us walking, running and writing. When we became older, our parents can teach us calculating, riding and so on.[url=] Even though they are not familiar with this knowledge related to such abilities, they can have good commands of them by short-term study and be competent for instructing us[/url][a1] . But how can parents be capable of teaching their college boys as years goes by? Since college students learn special knowledge, only experts in certain fields can give them right instruction they need. It is more possible to have professors who are expertise in their subjects respectively rather than genius parents that rival your professors in all your courses.. Therefore, obviously parents aren't the best teaches to their grown-up children.

   Besides, children can't spend lots of time with their parents as they will finally leave their home to study or work. It is hard for them to get a chance
to communicate with their parents. Therefore, parents won't tell how to solve problems. That is to say parents can't teach their children in such condition; instead, that are teachers or friends or the managers teaching and helping the children to solve problems.

  Moreover, sometimes parents' opinions are based on their old experience which might be out of date. For example, suppose I am facing a difficult problem in an environmental class on how we should treat the waste water emitted from a chemical factory? According to
knowledge gained in his past years, my father may suggest me using an end- treated method in detail. However, the end-treated method has been washed out for its serious environmental effects. As a result, my father guides me into a wrong way. Hence, parents' suggestions, especially on modern issues, are often helpful today. Thereby, we can also conclude that parents are not the best teachers.

[a1]Improper expression





[ 本帖最后由 写在心里 于 2008-1-28 04:07 编辑 ]

刚看到回帖呵呵，用grown-ups最好，我居然还用个grown-up children，晕，误导了。。

ls好敬业呀,值得鼓励~~~