文章的段落结构很清晰,第1篇文章写成这样很不错了,争取争取作文能打个高分呢
LZ有一些小的语法问题:
比如第一句的应该是nowadays,又如it is easy to predict what them are thinking,应该是they;再比如a outgoing person,应该用an.
每段里面都有一些语法问题~
应该是笔误吧,但是写完了一定要养成检查的习惯哟
还有一些小问题(纯属个人意见),先瞧瞧看
第1句话:Friends nowaday have become one of the most important part of our lives
我感觉不是nowadays吧,好像自古以来就是重要的,呵呵
Sometimes people will face the choice that whether to make friends similar to them, or friend different from them insdead.
When being asked, different people may have differnent point of view. Some may perfer to make similar friends, while other believes that friends different from them is better for them
虽然点出不同的观点是必要的,但总觉得以上两句有一些重复了~
过渡词句都是很不错的,加油练,呵呵
PS:建议LZ以后先用word检查一下拼写或是语法
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本帖最后由 ecarolfly 于 2008-2-5 18:38 编辑 ]