wohao你的作文我粗略的看了一下
6 Z: V& T5 d8 x" I/ Y) \观点先不论了，里面语法错误倒是不少，你是不是写完了没有检查过呢6 N% Z, A- ^0 w7 Z1 H, D+ I
虽说用词很到位，但是一定要关注语法，尤其是在你写长句子的时候。5 S' E  X- w: b2 `9 h5 I( T
我发上来你也粗略的看一下，呵呵黄色标记的是语法，没改， 你自己先瞧瞧。* D9 p. O) S8 J' J3 J, B4 ?
批注的也有一些是语法，有一些是我的小小想法 : J3 u5 f6 g# M5 i( l
虽说害怕打击你了，但是这些错误一定得注意，要不你用词用得再好，观点再好，这些错误还是会再造成阅读障碍的。
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[ 本帖最后由 ecarolfly 于 2008-5-8 09:57 编辑 ]

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改的比写的还认真呢+ E& m  W/ U5 R, i* f. M; }. m$ k
你要好好学习哦3 g1 m5 `" c5 W" @$ K
我的写作啊~~~~~
" V' ^% \1 U. M" E* u3 H* S看来以后等你们2考完了就都来帮我吧
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e多谢了~~~~~~, ?* K( v7 l' n! B( ^3 m0 ]. t
不要怕打击我哈+ ?4 q. b0 z( C, T
我语法什么水平我自己最清楚
4 {; e+ j7 y. G% @一直高中以来就是个,,,,,
) t- D% r. M* G3 W8 [: E我会仔细看的( y/ D: ^  w- K) _! R/ t+ c1 j
估计你改比我写还痛苦吧?3 s+ u7 ~7 ]1 z; K
呵呵~~~~9 H4 `  c1 p* f8 r2 F3 S8 e) E6 b
LORA你就别幸灾乐祸了!
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再次感谢!

能正视自己的weakness$ O* o/ t# b. y3 n
要的就是这样的态度。。。9 c2 _. y# t. `" y) A& Y
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我的语法才糟糕了没有笑你你权利了
: O& @; M8 f* e9 T; B只是觉得e很辛苦的在忙你。。。

没笑我就好```````
4 g* P8 e# C1 Y2 i问题总要面对解决的!
% o# n$ r' L5 c6 F+ `* ~: p) o改比写还认真比较夸张,....* S) F# y1 m  v4 N: x8 q
怎么说我也是认真写的哈 4 J6 ?. J. j& i) k6 A
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e:这篇文章多用了点长句子  R  u- ~2 a( T, b& {! q. n
就力不从心了......$ j5 J% s8 t; `4 L9 \
几天没动手了 又退拉....
# X& f4 j9 w8 o7 s那些错误写的时候怎么就注意不到呢. M# ], N/ N" G
我自己改了些地方
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3 p) K; W8 U! M7 l谢了哈

超赞！面对T的强大友谊！前进！大家都会有好成绩的！感动中~~

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是啊 大家都会有好成绩的!6 a. U4 b- ^7 p7 P* M' u

昨天听写2
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2 ^# C" R3 C' M* j1 l口语DELTAQUIZ55 a) Z" B0 P/ v! @: Q) B) b1 o4 J
185口语10
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做设计做了好久 这两天要把它赶完!
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Before we continue, you should understand an important concept that is the notion of culture area.) S9 p* D2 i- l" T0 }  E  v! i
A culture of area is not a colony of artists but geographic inhabitated(inhabited) by different people with similar cultures. A culture area is relatively consistent in terms of land features, for instance, the land is mountains or flat and climates, there are a similarity in the kind of plants and animals and settlers. I take what I called a bottom up approach to study of culture. That is not mean I go to those sites or people are digging for artifacts. But rather, it means I think culture something itv grows out of daily needs of people’s life. Like finding food or protecting themselves against weather. The routines and social order the people crate in order to deal with these things for(form) culture. So, living in what is now Alaska People who surroundings are cold or not fit to agriculture and who depend on fishing You can see how routines differ from people who lived in warm desert region. So, if that clear to everyone, we can continue, so, moving on. Anthropologist feel that in what is now the US of Canada there are nine culture areas. We examine all of them next few weeks, but let us start with our own area.3 m" ?9 ]6 _! h
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Can you give me an idea about what I missed in sociology class on Tuesday?
- ~1 F: i: ~! o* F+ ]* `Oh, it was really interesting. First, we under over material on how influence(infants) normally shift to become interested in people than objects. You know, at first baby just look like things only later do they start to interact with people. And then we talk about play of as part of as socialization of children  Q& p$ ~5 d0 w) f2 y/ ~. j* F( W, \
Play, you mean like games or make believe. Yeah, all different .kinds of play apparently it is important for children to experiment different roles like pretending their parents instead of a child also throw play they learn to adapt as roles of their social groups.
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) ^. |; e0 `, s: O8 e# d7 kA lot of campus American works on psychological development. He said for children play is not just a form of recreation(replication) the way as adults. When children play, they can deal with problems and they can learn, they can even express the things, like fearing and frustration. The children are not successful in play they even have the most(emotional) problems expressing thing later in life..
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Yeah, he talked research on animals behaviour(behavior) and how young animals play too. And professor says there is a lot of evidence play biologically base,. That means animals have instinct that lead them to play to explore into learn about environment. So, it is play it that animals and humans get exposed to different experiences. Exactly, and that sharpen(shot) all kinds of skills. Thinking skills as well as physical skills that they need to suriva(survive)l1 }6 S$ x2 _# J
I have to go now, but let us talk more about it before next class.
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我全部抽出来说说，lora也帮忙看看
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1.not only we need money to support our family, but also we need the money to purchase all kinds of daily things.
2 Y: P+ s1 P$ J7 N- m+ T% U这句话逻辑好像有问题。钱可以用来支持家庭，也可以用来买日常用品。。。用中文看，前后有点不着调阿。
! w; s3 i. S0 w# `  U; i9 b7 Q我知道你是想解释Money plays a vital role，但是有点解释的不太好。在第一段尤其不能为了表达你很漂亮的not only， but also，而滥竽充数。
5 I4 r% s2 w/ {7 @因为第一印象很重要。% j! t3 e* i+ H9 F& u4 o# ^1 }" c
2. From where I stand, I prefer the later(second) one.
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3.For example, Yuan-long-ping, a noted scientist in China, he (which)is interested in searching on (of)the method of growing rice。
6 d+ \4 e9 z9 ^. M还是没改对，呵呵，他是个人哦，所以应该用who.) x: @4 U& q, T- s1 Z8 N1 Q' [% O
4.And this process feeds bake(offers) unspeakable enjoyment to him.   v8 v- s" I0 J7 k
你说，这句意思是 这个过程给他带来了无以言表的ENJOYMENT5 l# q( z$ H: R: o. }
但是总觉得这句话用英文说得有点怪怪的3 V% k% R. r% ?* Y" h
5. No matter how hard the situation they have to faced with(face with?), no matter what kind of trouble or dilemma they are trapped in, no matter the other(the other 改为how the) people throw a strange view and misunderstanding to them,(是用throw on的短语吧？) they can get their will power from the enjoyment on their work or the things they are concentrate on/ N0 N2 S$ _* {
第一个，直接用face就可以了
  h% A: x0 J! F( f! N' }第二、三个地方你可以用no matter how strange the attitude is that people throw towards them.' P1 ?. W8 u) I; c, V8 x
这个句子乍一看挺生猛的，但是如果你频频出错，这种句子就是搞不拎清一大坨，糟掉了1 ^1 p7 j# L6 s1 G$ `' F! C4 Z1 l6 ~
所以宁愿要不犯错的小句子
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P.S.其他没有说的都是改对了的，呵呵/ |- W2 c9 \+ ]) r8 m' O' ~3 K- ~

* K& t5 {' i! z; J$ V8 q3 d[ 本帖最后由 ecarolfly 于 2008-5-9 09:57 编辑 ]

1：not only。。。,but also。。。. 的句型很单调。换作not only。。。,but。。。 as well.是不是稍微好些？
4 t+ b3 b8 J, p% j$ g# m) ~2：Therefore, there is a controversial discussion about whether people chose（choosing） the things they do for money or for their enjoyment.的第二个也就是在or 后面的for删去吧，觉得有点不够简练。
) j+ Q! r1 I4 p! g) M* ]3：take enjoyment in----喜欢, 享受, 欣赏
8 u; i# h! O1 l2 M4.And this process feeds bake(offers) unspeakable enjoyment to him. enjoyment 换作joyancy。同义词替换
* ]+ n+ C$ A* Y6 j) U$ |5：Thanks to the enjoyment, he succeeded on the method of growing rice, and solves(solved) the problem of hunger（换作starvation） in global world. 这里的succeeded on后面的on 换作with 更准确些，succeed with----在...上获得成功。 但是还是觉得这句的时态有点怪 （我的语法也是很~~~糗的 ）
/ j/ \( }5 g( F1 w; W6：And finally, he succeeded. His work is accepted by the whole world and affected a large number of people. 句子的开始换作in the ultimate ---到最后, 终于或者ultimately---最后, 终于, 根本, 基本上, N2 A% q# U" ]& D2 d) D5 S
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我只作了简单的表面上的修改$ s" Q6 t! [- M$ n: R, M8 g
不知有用否？" r$ D. w" m2 n1 T, D
wuhao和e再看看，是否可取1 o; T3 H9 W% @4 N9 ~; m
注：对照着你的原文看吧，是按顺序来的3 t8 y. r) O" B

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