Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.



As the society quickly developing, fast food and frozen food have entered people’s lives. They have indeed brought convenient to people’s lives. They make people spend less time on preparing food. Specially speaking, the emergency of these food has free women from home working and work outside the same as men. However, I think it has brings more problems.
Firstly, it reduced people’s communication and made people unfamiliar to each other. In the last time, preparing a meal for the whole family usually needs many family members’ efforts. They work together and do different kinds of things. Some person was washing the stuff, some is cutting, and someone may be doing the cooking. They helped each other. Moroever, they can talked together and share the happiness and sorrow in the family. The process is always full of funny and communication. But after the emergence of fast food and frozen food, people reduce the time for cooking food. At the same time, they reduce their communication.
Secondly, those fast food and frozen food are usually harmful for people’s lives. It is said in a survey that the fast food contain much more calories but less nutrient than the common food. These can cause people fat and lose balance. it is said that the number of over weighted children has increased 9% in 2006. many experts said that this mostly caused by the fast food. The frozen food also can kill the nutrient of the vegetable and in the low temperature. And after the long storing, the food also lose many good components.
Finally, less time spent on preparing food also makes people lazy. In nowadays, more and more people stay in office all the days. They are so busy so that they have no time for exercising. You can image that people prepare food only a few minutes after sitting in the office all day. Then he will stay in the sofa and watch TV for the whole night without any exercise. This kind of life must be unhealthy for everyone.
In summary, the development of food has changed people’s lives greatly, but we cannot igonor the problems in it.（360 words）

自己先顶一下
开始弄错了，以为是２０分钟呢，到时间发现才写了一半．．．

liruoran：http://www.xiaomaguohe.net/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=9128&pid=106846&page=1&extra=
猫猫球：http://www.xiaomaguohe.net/bbs/thread-8711-1-1.html

As the society quickly developing
错误，可以说with the society quickly developing或者说As the society quickly develops
fast food and frozen food have entered people’s lives
当life作为生活的时候不可数，可数的是生命
spend less time on preparing food
错误，on改成in或者把preparing去掉，只有spend time (in) doing或者spend time on sth.
the emergency of these food has free women from home working and work outside the same as men.
emerge是动词出现的意思，不过emergency表示的是紧急情况，应该是emergence或者occurrence
free 做动词的时候，过去分词应该是freed

[ 本帖最后由 whereiswc 于 2008-2-24 01:15 编辑 ]

However, I think it has brings more problems
应该是brought
unfamiliar to each other
应该是unfamiliar with
In the last time
你要表达的是在以前吧，应该是in the past time，而且the last time 只能跟at连用
Some person was washing the stuff, some is cutting
some表达的是一些，后面得复数名词，也不能跟is，另外时态上错误，完全不用was
They helped each other. Moroever, they can talked together and share the happiness and sorrow in the family
时态应该用一般式，虽然你要写的东西是过去发生的，但是时态上应该用一般式，因为表达的是过去的一整个状态
full of funny and communication
funny是形容词，用fun

people reduce the time for cooking food. At the same time, they reduce their communication.
reduce有很强的目的性，而人们不是刻意去reduce的，所以用在这边不好
are usually harmful for people’s lives
be harmful to
后面不看了，关键是注意自己的语法错误

lz的写作有太多语法错误了
另外，理由比较好，但是阐述过程太不条理了，缺乏逻辑性

lz的写作有太多语法错误了
另外，理由比较好，但是阐述过程太不条理了，缺乏逻辑性

brought convenience(文中convenient)
has brought(文中brings)
many experts said that this is mostly caused by the fast food(文中缺is)

有些语法错误,可能是写快了所致.
有些动词可以再提炼一下.

[ 本帖最后由 chin 于 2008-3-4 21:37 编辑 ]

1.the patten of the sentenses can be improved.
for example:"As the society quickly developing, fast food and frozen food have entered people’s lives. They have indeed brought convenient to people’s lives. They make people spend less time on preparing food."
                   maybe the following might be briefer and  more diverse in sentence patten.
                     With society developing rapidly, fast food and frozen food have been entering people's lives,bringing convenience to us,for less time is spent on preparing food.