Movie with Entertainment &Seriousness

Over thousands of movies have been played on big screen each year which could appeal people to sit in theatre watching characters acting by actors who they might like for over 90 minutes, sometimes even more. That is the magic of movie, or what they called Cinematography. As some movies could entice us to laugh, some could make us start to think stuff through. Being a huge movie fan, I always enjoy the movie with seriousness even though I watched loads of amusing movies.

Serious movie would make people begin to consider what things like in their own hands which is necessary for the people who live in the modern world because they need to calm down from the rush current of economy development. Thinking is essential for the one whom being a human since we are distinct from other animals. Researches for years disclosed that the percentage of brain of a normal human is the largest one compared to all the animals on the earth because of the utilization since we started to try to stand up. Thinking is the way we survived until now and will still be the primary way to survive in the future.

Each great movie is constantly and primarily constituted by things that could attract people to think throughout the history of movie. No one could deny the fact that every great movie would not be memorized without the things that touched us seriously. They are moving us, shocking us and even stunning us. This year, Oscar Academy Awards goes to There Will Be Blood, No Country For Old Man and The Diving Bell And The Butterfly which are all the ones with serious things in humanity and society. I bet no one ever saw a movie such as Charlie’s Angels won an award.

Though entertaining is important for current people who have to work or study really hard every day and need to relax in the movie, thinking still matters more for us. Laughing is good for our health but after we saw a movie that amused a while, we barely remember them. I remember I cried 2 times when I was watching A Beautiful Mind, but I could not remember whether I laughed during I was watching Mr. Beans’ Holiday.

Rushing hours made us want to relax, numerous issues we faced in work made us want to entertain but over 1 billion people still want to spend more than 3 hours to sit in theatre watching Titanic that got the most tickets in the history of movie, which is the spirit of human.

因为很久没练了,这一篇是熟悉一下结构类的问题,花的时间久一些
请大家帮忙看看有什么结构性的问题么,谢谢

[ 本帖最后由 hys17 于 2008-3-11 22:04 编辑 ]

拜托大家帮忙,谢谢

They moving us, shocking us and even stunning us
谓语呢？

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Though entertaining is important for current people who have to work or study really hard every day and need to relax in the movie, thinking till matters more for us. Laughing is good for our health but after we saw a movie that amused a while, we barely remember them. I remember I cried 2 times when I was watching A Beautiful Mind, but I could not remember whether I laughed during I was watching Mr. Beans’ Holiday.

建议移到第二段。

个人觉得conclusion  很有新意！

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原帖由 heqiongsophie 于 2008-3-11 18:41 发表
They moving us, shocking us and even stunning us
谓语呢？

谢谢....这个错误真丢人.........

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原帖由 heqiongsophie 于 2008-3-11 18:45 发表
个人觉得conclusion  很有新意！

谢谢这位朋友,还有什么结构性的问题么

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原帖由 heqiongsophie 于 2008-3-11 18:43 发表


建议移到第二段。

你发现了这么多问题,不过对于这一点我是按照戴云老师的一个经典结构来写的:正方优点2个详写,反方优点1个略写并且和正方的优点比较.
所以如果移到第二段的话会感觉有点主次混乱