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It has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books.” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

Books and experience are completely different sources that provide us knowledge and expand us horizon. When it comes to which one is better, some argue that experience plays a significant role to gain knowledge , while others hold the opposite idea. Both methods may have their advantages and disadvantages, they can be applied under different circumstances. Anyway, I find myself agree with the latter.
Some people believe that sometimes the knowledge gained from experience is much deeper and more comprehensive than the one gained from books. Some personal experience teaches us several crucial knowledge in life which hardly can we gain from books. Besides, we can only gain some knowledge from experience, such as the ability to swim. If we only learn how to swim from books but never drop into the water to experience on our own, even we can get every details from the official guide to swim, never can we learn the ability to swim. Therefore, there’s no deny that books can not contain everything.
Despite there are some shortcomings in learning from books, the benefits of gaining knowledge from books are overweigh its disadvantages.
Firstly, compared with the knowledge that gained from experience, knowledge gained from books has a much wider range. It becomes more and more important for us to have a capability to gain knowledge quickly and widely due to the increasing process of globalization. Gained knowledge from books seems to be the most effective way to satisfy our demand. What’s more, Education Expert has said that the most easiest way for people to gain knowledge is that gaining knowledge from systemic sources. As everyone knows, books are systemic sources. Books are built with logistic sentences just as a house is built with bricks but a collection of logistic sentences can not be called books any more than a pile of bricks can be called a house. In addition, reading might be the most cheapest way to gain knowledge in the world. Imaging you are sitting in the public library, there are thousands of books you can learn that only required you the basic reading skills. An example of this may be given. The famous revolutionist Marks through reading the books in public library to learn several languages. According to above, reading is an excellent way to gain knowledge.
To sum up, gained knowledge from book is too alluring not to be chosen. Learning from books is effective, professional and costless.

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我不太會改。呵呵 改錯了不要怪我。

1.MOST后加原級吧？第四段有兩個地方出現了 此問題 most easiest   most cheapest


2.我覺得第三段比較適合于一個話題  如果這道題目是 “從書本上學到知識好還是不好 比較適合用這個”


但是這篇是 哪個好。 我建議你把這句該成“experencise's advantage means nothing when book's advantages are mentioned"


而且這句我個人覺得不要成為一段。加在第三段的后面。




3.  我覺得整篇作文的結構 不是特別的清晰。


我覺得第一段的結構很好。 第二段應該緊接著前段最后一句陳述你個人的觀點 就是書本好處 兩點 （最好分兩duan)


然后第四段寫實踐的好處 第五段寫 雖然實踐有好處但是書本的好處還是更重要 然后總結書本兩個好處




具體的語法 我也不太懂 再看看 呵呵

Generally, this artical is well written with enough supporting details and examples.
稍稍注意一下逻辑词顺序
To begin with,
In addition,
what's more,...

第一行的competely也可以参考下entirely 还有应该是provide sb with sth
plays a significant role to gain knowledge 应该是plays a significant role to gaining knowledge


gained knowledge from book is too alluring not to be chosen
too ........to.....
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